Talk:Gery Chico/GA2
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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 00:48, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.
Disambiguations: none found
Linkrot: none found. Jezhotwells (talk) 00:51, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
Checking against GA criteria
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Early life and education: This is an encyclopaedia, words such as "mom" and "dad" are not encyclopaedic.
- My apologies. Changed to "mother" and "father".
- Chico first pursued a pre-medical degree at the University of Illinois at Urbana–Champaign drop "first"
- Done
- In that time period,, perhaps "At that time"
- Replaced
- He earned his law degree in 1985 "earned" is not the right word, perhaps "gained".
- In US parlance, one "earns" a degree.
- From 1996 to 2003 he was a senior partner of Altheimer & Gray, when it became insolvent and dissolved. Rephrase, presume you mean that it was dissolved in 2003
- Rephrased. Hopefully there is less ambiguity.
- At first Daley asked Chico to become the CEO, but Chico refused because he was resuming his law career. "At first", better to drop this
- Dropped
- Furthermore, Chico had already subtly suggested his intentions to succeed Mayor Daley, "subtly" is a weasel word hera, implying a point of view.
- Removed
- Within a decade, what William Bennett, then U.S. Secretary of Education, had criticized as the worst public school system in the nation became hailed by then-President Bill Clinton as a national model This sentence is confusing
- Reworded. Hopefully I reduced the confusion!
- What is with the COI banner? Has this been resolved?
- I have a conflict of interest, since I served on Chico's campaign this year. I declared this on the GAN talk page. The first nomination was subsequently failed, in part because of the COI issue. Since then I have submitted the article for peer review, and submit it now for further GAN consideration.
- Early life and education: This is an encyclopaedia, words such as "mom" and "dad" are not encyclopaedic.
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- What happened to him after the failed mayoral campaign?
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Overall, the tone of the article appears to be rather promotional.
- I tried removing some the material that showed some hints of bias. What do you think?
- Overall, the tone of the article appears to be rather promotional.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- On hold for the issues above to be addressed. When they have, I will take another look, I am watching this page, please respond here. Jezhotwells (talk) 01:44, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
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- Thank you so much for your feedback! I have already begun to address some of them. I should be able to handle the rest of your comments soon. Geread (talk) 05:05, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: