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This is an old revision of this page, as edited by Alainas (talk | contribs) at 15:50, 24 April 2012. The present address (URL) is a permanent link to this revision, which may differ significantly from the current revision.

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I added the course banner. It would be good to start (carry on) the discussion of questions on this Talk page. BerikG (talk) 15:44, 19 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG[reply]

Peer Review

Hi Bryan, as prof. Berik mentioned today in class, your article stands short to the minimum word requirement, so you definitely needs to add more headings and text in your article. I would suggest that you should discuss the history of colonialism and imperialism, and how it kept the infrastructure in developing countries backward and primitive. Moreover, you can discuss the contemporary economic policies of development which are not addressing the core problems, like we saw in the video on Kenya, where private French corporations have overtaken the water supply of the country, and it had adverse effects on the lives of women. Furthermore, you can raise the point that it is gender division of labor which has been internalized by the developing countries, hence, only women perform these kind of labor. You have picked a very interesting topic, I am looking forward to read your final version. Dkhan2012 (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 03:02, 24 April 2012 (UTC).[reply]

Peer Review

Bryan, so far I think you have a good article. It is an interesting topic and there is some really good information in there. There were just a few grammatical things I found like proper punctuation with the references. Two that I noticed were for reference #2 and #8. It would be a good idea to just re-read with that in mind. Also, there were a couple sentences that were a little confusing. In your "Inclusion" section, the last sentence is a little lengthy and could benefit form some re-structuring to make it easier to understand. I also think this section could benefit form some more information to help with your overall word requirement and to help explain "women in planning". One other sentence in the "Malawi" section; "Women in Malawi have also initiative" doesn't quite make sense. Overall, I think you have done a nice job with the article. It just wouldn't hurt to have a little more information throughout. I look forward to seeing the completed version. Alainas (talk) 15:50, 24 April 2012 (UTC)Alainas[reply]

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