Talk:Tara Teng/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 1ST7 (talk · contribs) 05:36, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this nomination. Initial comments should be posted by tomorrow. --1ST7 (talk) 05:36, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Here's the review:

Well-written
- This phrasing is a little vague: "At one of the churches where Terry pastored, Teng had a negative experience with people there when she was 15 years old. She reacted to the situation by rejecting Christianity and by making selfish decisions about her apartment, car, job, and boyfriend." If the specifics are not known, it would help for the wording to be altered to "She has said she reacted to..."
- When referring to the ages of trafficking victims in the "Philosophy" section, it seems to go from spelling the age to using numbers ("twelve" to "13" and "3"). I believe the general rule on Wikipedia is to use spelling for ten and under and numbers for anything higher.
Verifiable with no original research:
- Can you please add a citation to the quote at the end of the second paragraph in the lead?
Broad in its coverage:
Neutral:
Stable:
Illustrated, if possible, by images:

I'll put the article on hold to give you time to address these things. Thanks for your work! --1ST7 (talk) 07:19, 6 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking on this review! I have reworded the phrase about rejecting Christianity, made the numbers consistent with the general rule, and added a citation at the end of the second paragraph of the lead. Neelix (talk) 12:57, 6 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, so I'm passing the article. Congratulations, and thanks again for your work! --1ST7 (talk) 20:25, 6 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]