Talk:Thomas Bailey Marquis/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: E.M.Gregory (talk · contribs) 23:56, 30 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Interesting sounding man, but article is not yet ready for prime time. 1.) First problem is the lede, it's far too long - needs to be pared down. 2.) the first 2 paragraphs of the "Early Life" section are sourced to a chapter-length biography of Marquis published in a book written by Marquis. My question is how reliable this is as a source for facts about events long before marquis was born. I am guessing that the writer worked from family lore related to him by Marquis, if these are family stories, they should be identified as such. Or just leave out stuff that happened to subject's ancestors.

Overall, the bars to good article-dom are the fact that the article is verbose and offers overmuch detail for an encyclopedia; it might prove useful to break Keep the Last Bullet for Yourself out as a stand-alone article. And the overly promotional tone of some material, for example, in the Value to scholars section we read: "Marquis' body of work is of great value to scholars..." but the section fails to support this assertion.E.M.Gregory (talk) 23:56, 30 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]