User talk:Louis Patterson476/sandbox

Houdini was a pretty sweet guy

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Louis Patterson476, this is a good summary of the main issues affecting fatherhood in the interwar period in Canada. It's well focused and includes relevant and reliable sources. I think to edit, you could elaborate in a few places, and provide the reader with more context. What was the impact of WWI on Canadian men (we can't assume readers know). You could also link to the page about Canadian soldiers in WWI. What was the specific impact of the Depression on Canadian men? What were unemployment rates, for example? I can lend you a book that argues that domestic violence, despair and suicide all increased during the 1930s in Canada -- it's Kristina Srigley's Breadwinning Daughters.

Also, beware of writing in an essay style. Write as if you were talking, explaining a topic to someone. Your first sentence is a bit vague - what kind of imposed change to you mean? Was there legislative changes imposed? Or was this more of a cultural shift? As you say, there was a difference between the idealized father and the behaviour of men.

Keep at it! This is looking good. Cliomania (talk) 04:42, 31 March 2016 (UTC)