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16:59:44, 1 December 2016 review of submission by Kaforney
Hi Smmurphy,
I've made several revisions to the page after looking at the page with a set of fresh eyes and realizing where I went wrong when creating. Wondering if it makes any difference if the sources cited are configured as footnotes--or if they need to be written in the form to go under the "References" section. Please let me know if one is more valuable over the other.
Thanks! Kaforney (talk) 16:59, 1 December 2016 (UTC) @Kaforney: Thank you for your question. As the article is a draft and may have others look it over, I replied in a comment to the article. Smmurphy(Talk) 17:37, 1 December 2016 (UTC)
17:53:25, 1 December 2016 review of submission by Kaforney
Thank you Smmurphy for that response! Incredibly helpful! This is my first time creating an article so I'm still learning about what's considered encyclopedic vs. advertising. Your direct feedback and tips are much appreciated and extremely constructive for my understanding.
Kaforney (talk) 17:53, 1 December 2016 (UTC)
- You are welcome. The advice I added to the article is actually a bit harsh, it signals to other people who might consider/approve articles for creation what I think are the issues with your sources. Looking at the article again, here is even more specific advice. tl; dr, start smaller.
- Your lede talks about the different contractors used and includes mission statement-like sentiments, all of which could be cut. A better lede might simply say:
- Skye Canyon is a master planned community in the northwest region of Las Vegas Valley, located in Clark County, Nevada. It is being developed by Olympia Companies in conjunction with New York investment firms Stonehill Capital Management and Spectrum Group Management. First construction of the community began in the fall of 2014.
- I would drop the recent developments section, they won't continue to be recent developments for long and wikipedia isn't a newspaper.
- The location section could better read:
- Skye Canyon is located along U.S. Route 95 in the Las Vegas Valley about 13 miles from downtown Las Vegas. It was intentionally selected for its proximity to Mount Charleston and Lee Canyon.
- The climate section is fine, it is a bit too much info given how short the rest of the article might be, but perhaps the rest of the article will grow as the community does.
- For the history section, I'd write:
- Initial planning of the community began during the last quarter of 2013 and plans were officially approved by the city on April 10, 2014. The first neighborhoods to be built and released to the public in Skye Canyon were Teton Falls, Teton Cliffs, and Evergreen. On Jan. 21, 2015, City Council approved the stretch of Horse Drive between U.S. 95 and Iron Mountain Road, as well as the segment of Fort Apache Road between U.S. 95 and Moccasin Road to be renamed Skye Canyon Park Drive to begin establishing the community as a distinct territory. Hualapai Way between Grand Teton Drive and Moccasin Road was renamed Skye Village Road at the same junction in time. Eagle Canyon Park was first opened to the public January 2016 and the master community held a grand opening on March 19, 2016.
- But even that is a bit much. Perhaps someone else would recommend some more cutting.
- I would combine the neighborhoods and amenities sections. This combined section would consist of one sentence which basically names the neighborhoods. Then another couple sentences with the names of the parks and the neighborhoods they are in, including, perhaps, the two parks outside the boundary. Community buildings might not really belong in the article at this point.
- The schools section is ok, but cut the list, so all you need is the paragraph you wrote:
- Plans for Skye Canyon's ongoing development includes the building of new school facilities for elementary, middle, and high school education, but construction will be subject to Clark County school funding--to be determined when that phase of development approaches. William & Mary Scherbenback and James Bilbray Elementary schools are located inside of Skye Canyon's borders, while Ralph Cadwallader Middle, Edmund Escobedo Sr. Middle, and Arbor View High schools are all located within five miles of the community. Somerset Academy charter school lies approximately four miles south of Skye Canyon's southern most border, with separate facilities for elementary and middle/high school students.
- Then make sure each paragraph has a citation at the end and most if not all of your citations are from third party sources. In my opinion, that would be a good place to start. After that, you can look at sources and see if there is anything else that encyclopedic to add. Smmurphy(Talk) 19:08, 1 December 2016 (UTC)
20:17:11, 5 December 2016 review of submission by MattyJ44
Have all the other accounting softwares listed in the article Comparison of accounting software satisfied the notability requirement? MattyJ44 (talk) 20:17, 5 December 2016 (UTC)
- @MattyJ44: I'm glad you've asked, take a look at the sources used in those pages. From what I see, most articles cite independent news sources. I think that is the main issue with the LedgerLite pagep; In my opinion reliable sources are usually considered those which have an editorial process independent of the article's source. Can you add some sources like that to LedgerLite that are about LedgerLite? Smmurphy(Talk) 20:38, 5 December 2016 (UTC)