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Manufacturing workers
Women in China (aka rural to urban migration) Young Chinese girls are sent to cities to work in factories, where they work for low wages, and often go unpaid for a large length of time.[25] The documentary China Blue provides insight into the treatment of these young Chinese women and the conditions under which they live.[25] Many of the laborers are migrant workers that travel from the countryside to the city to find work, and as seen in China Blue, these workers are often underpaid, and face strict regulations in the city. The city provides legislation and/or policies stating that the factories must house them. By having dormitories onsite, the factory works like a small city. It provides food and shelter, and because the factory controls every part of the laborer's life, laborers can be forced to work late, and can be penalized for bad behavior, or not meeting their quotas.
According to Ngai, the dormitory system is also stressful on these migrant workers as it removes them from their families.[26] Isolation and maltreatment in the form of cheap labor is how China competes globally. China forces its workers to work long hours, subsidizes their living expenses, while keeping their wages low.
Burmese in Thailand Ruth Pearson discusses the millions of Burmese women who migrate to Thailand each year. These women almost entirely make up the agricultural and manufacturing workforce.[27] The Burmese who migrate are typically undocumented, and there is very little regulation of the migration. The workers, more than half of which are women, are considered disposable, and face aggression from the Thai government and police force. The Thai manufacturing and agricultural businesses are far more dependent upon the Burmese migrants due to their low pay, and the amount of work that they can demand from them.[27]
Migration within Africa (ADDED SECTION) There has been an increase of female migration within Africa. Due to a all the harsh conditions Africa withstands such as starvation, poverty, and disease, these have been some of the reasons to increase the need for work. In Africa there has also been in increase in high male unemployment, which has been a factor in the increase of women working more.[1] Since women are working more and being the main providers for their families, they go wherever there is work. They don't always go out of the country for work, they tend to migrate within their country. The work that constantly has them moving from region to region is the agriculture and mineral deposits.[2] Although there is work within their own country they don't always remain in the close regions. There are some that migrate outside their country. Some places they migrate to are, but not limited to, areas in North America or even Europe.[1] There are many jobs that they are willing to travel to. A reason that has attracted African migrant workers to places outside their country is the demand for domestic work.[1] This is a good step forward - I would have liked to see some more integration of sources, but keep that in mind moving forward - Prof H
Peer Review
Peer Review on JOrtz Additions to Women Migrant Workers from Developing Countries - Jaden Gordon
- I believe that the first sentence is a run on sentence but I am not completely sure.
- I like the source that you provided for the high male unemployment as well as the fact that you bring in the extra fact that due to a high male unemployment, more Women are having to work.
- Centering the migration of working women mainly around the work and poverty aspect is a good idea, shows where the country is at.
- I think what could be added is the effect of what is happening and what the country and the individuals in the country are working towards.
- More sources could make your section more credible and give more background knowledge that we as the readers do not know about.
- Good job keeping the content neutral with no bias. It brings out more information and less opinion which is what I believe is looked for in this assignment.
Peer Review
· The contribution made to this article helped it be stronger. More information was added that also gave more clarification on the topic. · Due to all the information that was added, it kept this article very non-bias. · The sources in the added section were great, but perhaps having more sources to make your addition to this article stronger. · Overall, I did not find any misspellings or improper sentences.