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Keri and Raven's review of Models of Deafness

Models of Deafness paragraph: I was thinking about possibly adding to the medical perspective of deafness including that its seen as a disability. The sentence you pulled from your article says "undesirable," which is true, but the term disability is one of the most problematic terms correlated with Deafness. You included disability in the Medical model paragraph, so maybe stating how Deaf people are viewed as disabled by the medical field.

Medical Model of Deafness "While medical ethics and law dictate that it is up to the patient (or the patient's legal representative) to decide the treatments he or she wishes, the press and professional literature are increasingly normalizing the discussion regarding using cochlear implants, oral education, and regular school placement[1]; all being popular choices under the medical model of deafness."

   - I would include hearing aids along with cochlear implants. I would also change the term of regular schooling to mainstream placement.

Cultural Model of Deafness "It may also include people within the social science professions which seek to identify, define and conceptualize the very essence of what constitutes a culture or cultural model of human experience, as well as professionals in mediating roles between cultures, notably persons engaged in activities of simultaneous interpretation, and schools."

   - I like that you included this, but I feel you missed some. Children of Deaf Adults (CODAS) are a part of Deaf community, but are hearing. Parents of Deaf children, Siblings of Deaf children (SODA), Late-deafened. You included Deaf of Deaf, which is 100% true, as well as interpreters and such, but there's so much more. Possibly some research to see how wide the Deaf community actually expands would be a good way for you to reflect how large the community actually is.

Cultural vs Medical " Both hearing and deaf parents understand that it is easier for a hearing parent to raise a hearing child because of their intimate understanding of the hearing state of being. It follows that a deaf parent will have an easier experiences raising a deaf child since deaf parents have an intimate understanding of the deaf state of being."

  -This statement is 100% true, but I feel the word easier may seem a little biased, or if a hearing parent reads it, may become intimidated or have a loss of confidence when raising their Deaf child. Instead of easier, I would maybe put they are able to understand the experience? Something along the lines of that.

"For example, people with disabilities, gay people, and women are not linguistic minorities, as are members of the deaf community, since their culturally determined behaviors do not center on a unifying language as in the communities of Hispanic-Americans and Native-Americans. Gay culture and American deaf culture, both of which experience the disadvantages of being minority cultures, bear resemblance to one another in that most members of these two minority groups do not share their minority identity with their parents and cannot develop it at home. However, gay culture does not rally around a unifying language as is seen with a minority language group like the community of deaf people."

   - I actually like your comparison on this. Would love for you guys to elaborate even more.

Overall, I like the idea of your article! It shows the diverse perspectives of Deafness, which is extremely important.

Peer Review

I think it's great that you're adding a citation to each of the various models so that people who are curious could easily find resources. Also, some lines in the original article seems to be skewed and unclear. For example:

"Physicians and scientists are often labeled as adherents of the medical model by Deaf individuals, who contrast it with their own cultural model. However, many of those who are so labeled dispute its validity."

Glad you're putting this under review as I'm not too sure where this is going.

This is intriguing: "It is also the basis on which governments provide deaf people with financial support and educational services which are not available for members of other cultural minority groups." It might be worth being a little more explicit with this? Perhaps examples of the aforementioned financial support and educational services?

Similar suggestion for this as well: "According to research in the social sciences, membership in the deaf community is a matter of culturally determined behaviors and not of medical diagnosis." It might be worth mentioning which research proved this true.

One might need to be careful about drawing parallels between minority groups as one might risk erasing the experiences of those who identify with more than one of the groups and also downplaying the gravity of the oppression faced by certain groups. For instance, if one is to describe the Black community as experiencing similar struggles with the Deaf community, what might one make of the experiences of the Black Deaf community members? This might be worth thinking about.

Overall, worthwhile efforts!

Anna Lim Franck 02:58, 25 March 2019 (UTC)Anna