User talk:Madrugada11/Wilbour Papyrus/Epichippo Peer Review

Lead Section

I am assuming since there were only changes to the Content and Purpose, there was no intentional change for the lead, and you are keeping the original article. Reading the original article, I do think maybe one thing could be expanded upon more. Would you consider writing a sentence or two that expands on the importance of the wilbour papyrus itself? Either than that, I don't think there's anything else that should be changed, it seems that it's all very straight to the point. Epichippo (talk) 00:53, 4 March 2024 (UTC)

Clarity of Article Structure

I do believe the sections are organized well, I especially like how the Content & Purpose section is curated with the land and taxation/rent. I don't think anything should be changed in this aspect. Because there is not much information on this paper, and is relatively self-explanatory, I think it's very cut and dry. Epichippo (talk) 00:54, 4 March 2024 (UTC)

Coverage Balance

I like how you added more onto the content and purpose because it expands upon the actual importance of the paper. I don't think anything felt out of place and I liked the explanation of the small land plots, especially. It seems that it also has a pretty neutral viewpoint and doesn't seem to sway the reader in any specific way. It's just describing what the paper does, and what Egyptologists have been able to do with it. The overall coverage balance seems very simplistic and not over the top, which is nice. Epichippo (talk) 00:55, 4 March 2024 (UTC)