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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:33, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • "Big Apple Rappin" lead has lost the apostrophe on Rappin'
Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The album is " could probably link album as so far you haven't said what it is!
I've changed the earlier statement to say "compilation album". Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Johan Kugelberg. Kugelberg had" repetitive.
Changed phrasing. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "period "Rappers Delight" became" Rapper's
Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "was predominantly The music is primarily hip hop with a disco backing track first became a hit and describe the compilation as a collection of "the first great records."" just too weird for me to parse.
Wow what word soup I wrote. I think i've made it alright now. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Along with the music compiled was photography and flyers" -> "Along with the music, photography and flyers were compiled...
Changed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "research and compiling of the" compilation.
changed. 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
  • "five star rating" five-star
Changed. 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
  • "Division of Rare and Manuscript Collections" is this notable enough for a redlink?
I'm not sure. I'll leave it blank for now as i'd have to do some research on that. It's a little out of my area of knowledge. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "based person who" person is a really odd way of saying it.
I've re-phrased it slightly based on the description of him here. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "culture history collecting" comma after history.
done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Kugelberg collection of early hip hop material was done" -> "Kugelberg's collection of early hip hop material was made"
done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "genre as staggeringly difficult" POV for an encyclopedia.
I've re-phrased this as this is Kugelberg's own words, which i think is not against POV. It should have been in quotes. Thoughts? Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the "Born in the Bronx" book" italics for book titles.
Changed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "release of "Rappers Delight" and " Rapper's

" Apparently basic grammar alludes me. I've changed it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • "and R&B backed-tracks" R&B-backed tracks.
Updated. I've also changed R&B to link to Rhythm & Blues to avoid a re-direct. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the Village Voice" the should be inside the link.
changed The Village Voice link. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • ""A fine new ... one too many "
Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "success of "Rapper's Delight."" should be 'Rapper's Delight'"
I think I've changed what you wanted here. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • No indication of what formats the release was made on?
I've added some information on that to the release section. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Any indication of chart/sales perfomances?
Nothing I could find. As a Various artists album or the label. Can't find anything on Officialcharts or Billboard relating to it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Caz image should use the upright parameter.
That's a little new to me but I believe i've added it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 5 needs en-dash, not hyphen, in the year range.
i've added the en-dash (–) to it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Date formats should be consistent, DMY, MDY, pick one.
I've made them consistent. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)Big Apple Rappin'[reply]

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:41, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think i've addressed all your issues @The Rambling Man:. Anything else? Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]