Talk:Munchausen by Internet/GA1

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Unclear writing. Way too formal. In short, hard to read. The second paragraph has no references (perhaps OK in a short lead, when the info is reffed below, but not in a long lead). It looks like the bulk of the article is based on the work of a single person (Feldman), but that's not clear from the beginning. The main need is for more natural language. Noloop (talk) 20:06, 12 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

As I understand it, in simple language, this subject is: Making up stories of serious medical conditions, presumably to get attention. And doing it on the Internet. So...1) That can be said in a way that is easy for readers to understand quickly, but this article doesn't. 2) Why isn't this a section in the article on Munchausen syndrome generally? Not sure it needs its own article. Enlighten me! Noloop (talk) 20:12, 12 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]