Talk:The Garth Brooks World Tour (2014–2017)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 11:54, 29 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Thatdee69: I am going to start the GA review today and give you my comments over the next couple of days. MPJ-DK 11:54, 29 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

copyvio check does not reveal any issues Y
External link too has found a couple of problems with dead links N

Article titled "Going to see Garth Brooks? 6 things you should know" is dead
"Garth Brooks' songs light up memories for joyous Denver crowds" is dead too

Source review

Claim of "expected to go into 2017" is only in the lead and not supported by the source after the next sentence.
Concert tour started in 2014 and source 1 is from 2014 stating "Europe and Australia next summer", but I am not seeing that in the article? Since "Next year" is actually 2015 and thus in the past, I don't think speculation that's proven to be wrong should be in the article, much less in the lead. So far it's been North American dates only right?
The entire "Tour Dates" section is unsourced as far as I can tell?
The statement "The tour broke the record for most tickets sold for concerts in a single North American city" is not supported by the source. The source states it was his (Books') record that was broken, it does not specifically state it was a general record. Nor are there any support for the claims that his last concert tour held these records previously.
Statement on "Most concerts in a city" is totally unsourced, claim like that would need a source.
Last statement in the lead on "statistically" is supported by a 2014 source, now that it's 2016 can we get something actual intead of statistical for the lead?
Statement each ticket sold for the tour is the same price, regardless of location in the venue is 1) not supported by the sourced and 2) wrong. So source only supports that the one location mentioned has the same ticket price and 2) prices can vary from venue to venue but all tickets at the same venue are the same price as far as i can tell - i did not see that every single ticket everywhere would be the same price. One source lists "$65.50" as the ticket price, another lists it as "$74.98" - clearly not the same price all over.
Source 1 is from October 10, 2014 - two cities into the tour - it cannot be used to reference statements such as Since its official announcement in July 2014, the tour has been in extremely high demand.

General Review

Lead states "despite only being in it's forth leg" - out of date statement (and "on" not "in")
Why does the info box specific "276 in North America"? why not just "276" since there has only been shows in North America it seems like a needless qualifier?

Conception

Garth Brooks' first and second world tours, 1993–94 and 1996–98 respectfully, were both successful.

Should be "in 1993-94 and 1996 through 98 repectfully"
What is the definition of "successful"? It it such a wonderfully vague term - artistically successful, financially, personally? Please clarify and such a statement should be sourced.

After his multi-year residency at Wynn Las Vegas, yet not embarking on a multi-city tour for thirteen years, Brooks announced plans for a world tour during an interview on Good Morning America in December 2013.

This reads kinda odd, especially the "yet not embarking" - which is kinda implied in a "residency". I think this could be totally rewritten please.
Tense change - "Brooks announced" then shifts into "Will be individually released"

Ticket sales and records

Resale controversy

How is anything in this section really significant enough to warrant the word "Controversy" in the headline? It states "an issue arose" but not what that issue was. It states Brooks "called them out" but that's it - really I'm not even sure anything in here is worthy of a whole section? maybe noting the 470% increase - btw check your math - 71.50 being sold at 405 does not work out to 470%

System crashes

Honestly it's not THAT uncommon that systems crash due to demand, I don't think it deserves it's own totally separate section. I'd reduce the detail and add it in the "ticket sales and records" general section

Cancelled and rescheduled shows

Tiny section, could easily be included in the "Ticket sales and records" section instead of having a brief, two sentence section like that.

Stage design

Not sure why the layout is like that? it's basically a sentence per paragraph? if you combine the three it looks better and less than a "bullet list without the bullets" like it does now.

I think that is actually it for now. I am putting this on hold for 7 days to allow for improvements to be made. MPJ-DK 11:55, 5 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I think a ten day hold was fair for this. I am going to fail it for inactivity. MPJ-DK 17:26, 15 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]