Talk:Charlie Murder/GA1

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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 00:11, 11 March 2014 (UTC)

Hi, I'll be reviewing this article. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 00:11, 11 March 2014 (UTC)

OK, one thing - there is no "Development" section. I Googled "charlie murder interview" and found several good sources. [1] [2] There are probably more. I think this section is definitely something that needs to be in the article. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 00:07, 13 March 2014 (UTC)

Taylor Trescott Sure. I'll get back to you by the weekend with one. Can you take a look at the rest of it while I'm doing that? Sᴠᴇɴ Mᴀɴɢᴜᴀʀᴅ Wha? 00:26, 13 March 2014 (UTC)

OK, I'll get to it as soon as possible (might take a day, I've become busy). Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 00:28, 13 March 2014 (UTC)

Taylor Trescott - There is now a development section. I think it's ready for the review. Sven Manguard Wha? 02:58, 25 March 2014 (UTC)

• "one of the founding band members, Paul, out of the band" redundant use of band
• "The game was eventually released in August 2013 as part of Summer of Arcade, an annual Xbox Live Arcade promotion noted for releasing several of the platform's most acclaimed games." Seems out of place in the Plot section
• "mage, shaman, mesmer, and tank" Do you think you could explain or add links? I'm kinda confused
• "are a number mini-games" do you mean "number of"?
• Do you think you could include the GameRankings aggregation in the prose?
• Official Xbox Magazine should have italics, because it's a print publication. It should also be linked in the prose, for consistency with the others.

I will put it on hold. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 19:04, 25 March 2014 (UTC)

Taylor Trescott: Points 1, 2, 4, 5, and 6 are done. Regarding point 3, I took the class names from Digital Fix, which didn't go into additional detail about what the classes meant. I can replace the class names with something generic about having different classes, but I don't have the sources to go into further detail. What's your call? Sven Manguard Wha? 20:23, 25 March 2014 (UTC)

Note: Taylor Trescott has already indicated that he is going to pass this. Just waiting for him to get a computer. See "Sorry, I've been without a computer for a while (on phone). I'll pass it ASAP.". Sven Manguard Wha? 06:28, 2 April 2014 (UTC)