Talk:Circus (Britney Spears album)/GA2

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 13:17, 26 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Toolserver shows that there are a number of shady and redirect links in the article. Nominator please correct them. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 06:17, 7 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done WikiRedactor (talk) 15:06, 7 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

So so sorry for the delay. i'm starting right away. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 15:00, 16 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

In the infobox you can mention the recording locations
Spears wanted to make an album that was "a little bit lighter" --> consecutive usages of album, try this: "Spears wanted to make her sixth studio effort "a little bit lighter"
Contributions to its production came from a wide range of producers, including long-time producers --> Again consecutive producers, production... please change the phrasing
The album has become her biggest-selling album ---> consecutive album
The third para of the lead is a little difficult to read, with the single chartings and the top-ten stuff a little warbled. Try rephrasing and splitting up sentences

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 19:07, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Background

shared a release date with similarly-titled The Circus by British group Take That --> shared a release date with similarly-titled album, The Circus, by British group Take That
There's no mention of the work of Let's Go To War
A rearrange needed in this section. It starts with Spears talking about her involvement, the development, then goes to talk about the release, then again back to recording info. It should be chronological: writing, development, recording, composition, release.. like wise

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 19:07, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Music

that were previously acknowledged --> remove previously
where its title sounds phonically like --> phonetically, not phonically
Can you reduce the boring usage of "The first rack" "The second track" "The third track..." and so on? Its pretty dull read
Again thje above point makes the rest of the section pretty dull and uninspiring

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 19:23, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Singles

The song was met with positive response from critics, who complimented its hook and empowering lyrics and deemed it as a return of form and a "comeback" single for Spears --> Source?
It shows Spears at a sex party --> sex party? I don't remember the video being at a sex party, was that the case with the groping?
you have used number 1, 3 and 19 as well as number fifty-two format... Pick one and stick to it througout

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 19:54, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Promotion

some fans have considered it as her official comeback --> Remove, its unimportant
This is a full–blown, full–out Britney Spears --> why en-dash between full-blown, full-out
Spears embarked on four legs of the tour, visiting North America twice, and performed elsewhere in Europe and Australia --> There were four legs of the tour, visiting North America twice, and others being Europe and Australia
The tour was well received by critics, who praised its aesthetics and complimented it as an entertaining show, while others criticized Spears's "lip-synching". --> source?

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 19:54, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Critical

Please italicize the mention of the album name within the reviewer's quotes like here: Rolling Stone's Caryn Ganz gave the album a positive review saying "Britney may have left the psych ward, but on Circus, she proves she's still a freak.
and classified it "As in 'media circus,' but ---> classified? He reviewed the album, wrong usage of word here
Slant Magazine is an online source, correct the link
There are just too many quotes in this section making it a WP:QUOTEFARM and violating WP:PLAGIARISM. Please paraphrase half of them at least

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 19:54, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Commercial

The album became the sixth fastest selling album of 2008. --> consecutive album
usage of No. 3 or number three, please maintain consistency
appeared on Billboard's component charts after the album's release. --> italicize Billboard

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 19:57, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

Use WP:ACCESS on the tables like you did on the certification table.

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 21:03, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

References

some unformatted references, correct them

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 21:03, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

On hold for seven days. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 15:24, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I have done a dummy edit on the article to show you the changes regarding WP:ACCESS which you have not completed yet. Once its done we are good to go. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 11:12, 18 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Whoops, sorry about that. I had went in to work on the charts and I noticed my referencing was a bit unorganized, so I went in to rearrange that and accidentally skipped the other formatting. This should do the trick! WikiRedactor (talk) 14:14, 18 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I'm fine with the additions and the corrections. Passing the article now. Checked the images also. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 14:48, 18 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]