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Review[edit]

I thought your paper was very well written and has sufficient information under the headings and subheadings. There were a few grammatical mistakes that I tried to fix. For example, your species name was not always italicized. I also added some hyperlinks. Overall, this is a good article. I would recommend adding sections on behavior; for example, adding a section for territorial behavior or mating behavior.
Mohp7 (talk) 20:29, 1 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Review and Edits[edit]

Good job on the article! I have a few suggestions. Some of the categories are a bit short. For example, the matic habits of this bee could be described a little more fully. What is meant by patrolling circuits? More details could also be added to the diet section.

I made a minor edit to the agricultural significance section to make it flow better and to better acknowledge the researchers and the study which was originallly referenced. However the sentence of the section below (starting with "The human method" )is still not very clear to me and I think it should be re-phrased or re-worked somehow. :

Original

One theory is that the increased output of the bee-pollinated fruits could be due to an optimized pollination schedule. The human method was standardized to 3 pollinations at specific times for each plant, while the bees have some internal mechanism at work.

Edited

In one study of Bombus vosnesenskii pollination activity, Dogterum et. al. theorized that the increased output of the bee-pollinated fruits could be due to an optimized pollination schedule. In this study, the human method was standardized to 3 pollinations at specific times for each plant, while the bees have some internal mechanism at work.

RNwumeh (talk) 02:53, 2 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Overall this is a well-organized article that goes into especially good detail about certain aspects of the yellow-faced bumblebee, especially on thermoregulation and incubation. First, I edited the introduction by lengthening it to give a better hook with a few more facts. For better organization, I deleted the section heading “Physiology” since “Description” was the only subsection. There was some poor sentence structure in various parts of the paper that I edited, including sentences in the Taxonomy and Description sections. In the Colony Cycle section clarification is required about colony establishment. As it reads, the overwintering queen establishes underground colonies and THEN finds an underground nest. The order here does not make sense. I made “Mating Habits” into its own section as well, although for better organization I would recommend making a “Behavior” section that would include mating, foraging, and pollinating behavior. Another minor edit I made was to add a link to the Wikipedia page for poikilotherms, as many readers may not know what poikilothermic means. Kjkozak (talk) 03:25, 2 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

More thoughts[edit]

Great job on this article! I really appreciated the species picture and range map that are present in the taxobox. I added some more hyperlinks to the page to increase traffic to and from the article. Moreover, I changed capitalization of the headings to comply with Wikipedia Standards. I also changed the organization of your page so to include a behavior section with multiple subsections. While I really enjoy your thorough discussion of thermoregulation, I believe it needs to be split up or condensed, but I am not familiar enough with thermoregulation to do so myself and I like your hard work. Additionally, some more pictures as they relate to the sections of your article would help illustrate your points more. Mebennett49 (talk) 00:11, 22 November 2015 (UTC)Mebennett49[reply]

Pictures! Pictures of your Bee![edit]

https://www.flickr.com/search/?text=Yellow-faced%20bumblebee&license=4%2C5%2C9%2C10

So there are a lot of pictures of your bee on Flickr that fall under the creative commons license needed for Wikimedia. I included a link to some of them, but I'm sure there are more. Pictures of what you describe would really help bring your article together. Also, if you could find any more information about diet in your bee, that would be great! PhonoxClassic (talk) 22:45, 30 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Distribution and Habitat[edit]

While I concur with others that this is a well written contribution, I question the leading sentence on distribution: "The Bombus vosnesenskii is a very common bee and is in fact among the most abundant bee species on the West Coast of the United States." I agree that this is a common BUMBLE bee, but it seems that the research on ALL bees is far too limited to make this blanket a statement about abundance. Some poorly observed bees may well be far more abundant but not noticed. Might the author consider revising this statement? GeeBee60 (talk) 15:21, 11 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]