Wikipedia:Peer review/History of virtual learning environments/archive1

History of virtual learning environments

This article was initially created as response to a call for prior art documentation for Blackboard's recently filed patent. Given the activist impulse motivating the creation, we would appreciate the perspective of the broader Wikipedia community to ensure that the content itself is appropriately factual and written from a neutral point of view.

Also, many of the contributors are first-time Wikipedians. Therefore, any style suggestions would also be appreciated.

Mfeldstein 19:32, 4 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

History articles normally start at the beginning and go through to the present (or the end). It's rather unusual that this article presents the most recent developments first.

I'd take out the blank line between bullet points, so more information fits on each screen.

Rather than display full URLs, add an intuitive name after each, e.g. Oncourse Press Release

Beef up the first paragraph a bit so someone stumbling across this article doesn't have to go to the linked article to find out what a Virtual Learning Environment is.

I made an attempt at this using some text from the linked article. Others may have further suggested improvements.

The "Unknown dates" section should probably be moved to the talk page, as it's a series of requests for information rather than the information itself.-gadfium 01:53, 5 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

This appears to have been done.

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Another way of breaking up text is to add quotes using the {{rquote}} (talk) template and its friends.

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— User:gadfium

That's definately an improvement.

It would be nice to break up the text with pictures or quotes. For example, the keyboard picture from the PLATO article could be added to the 1976 section.-gadfium 23:52, 5 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Another possibility would be to add a timeline. See m:EasyTimeline. It isn't easy to do, and the results don't always look good. See {{Timeline History of Computing}} for an example of an ambitious timeline which doesn't look very good (possibly due to my screen resolution).-gadfium 00:37, 6 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 01:25, 9 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]