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List of W.I.T.C.H. characters

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I've listed this list for peer review to find out what portion is needed to improve it. Note that mergeing with List of W.I.T.C.H. characters (TV show) and Cast of W.I.T.C.H. (TV series) is under way. I can't do the task that you suggested by myself alone. So I need someone's help.

Thanks, JSH-alive ^{talk • cont • mail} 07:21, 2 January 2010 (UTC) (Edited 15:31, 3 January 2010 (UTC) )

Note: The rules of WP:PR specify one nomination per editor per day. This is your second for 2 January (with another following on 3 January). There is a substantial backlog of articles waiting for peer review, so please observe this rule in future. Brianboulton (talk) 13:41, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Normally having all the cleanup banners at the top disqualifies the article from peer review, but here are some suggestions for improvement.

• This seems to be largely copied from other websites, which is a violation of copyright. I first noticed that the writing is not enyclopedic in tone - then I checked something at random with a Google search and found that the Cornelia Hale material is very close to this fan fiction web page.
  • this article: With long blonde hair and blue eyes, she might seem to be a stereotypical girl of that kind whose interest is seeming worthy of both love and envy. However, her character develops much in other directions.
  • website has: With long blonde hair and sapphire blue eyes, she might seem to be a stereotypical girl of that kind whose interest is seeming worthy of both love and envy. However, her character develops much in other directions.
• Or then I checked at random this material for Matt Wilson, one of the boys, and found it very close to the Wikia page on him:
  • this article: He sings and plays guitar for his band "Cobalt Blue". He works part-time at his grandfather's pet store along with Will and shares the same interest in animals as she does.
  • Wikia article: Matt sings and plays guitar for his band "Cobalt Blue". Also, he works part-time at his grandfather's pet store along with Will and shares the same interest in animals as she does.
• This raises several issues, the most important of which is WP:COPYVIO, so I have removed most of the article.
• Second biggest problem was that the article has no (zero) references, which are a must. See WP:V. Without them there is no way to verify waht is here, to check that is not a copyvio or original research.
• My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
• One they are added, per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase
• Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE
• The current lead is one secntence, which is way too little. The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article
• Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself
• My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 20:21, 21 January 2010 (UTC)

List of W.I.T.C.H. characters was created on 6 February 2009 by splitting "Characters" section from the W.I.T.C.H. article. and those descriptions dates back to 6 August 2005 and 23 September 2005. The fan fiction page was initially published on 08-03-09 and updated on 08-30-09. And Matt Olsen's Wikia page was created on April 4, 2009. So it looks like those external pages copied descriptions from Wikipedia. -- JSH-alive ^{talk • cont • mail} 03:45, 22 January 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for checking those - please undo my deletions in that case. The article still needs citations (has none now) an expanded lead, etc. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:55, 22 January 2010 (UTC)