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Samuel of Bulgaria

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I've listed this article for peer review because WikiProject Bulgaria is aiming to bring it to GA or FA status. I believe the article is very thorough and well-referenced and the illustrations can hardly be any better. My main concerns are the formatting and the grammar and style: it was written by a non-native speaker (User:Gligan) and edited by a non-native speaker (myself), so in order to meet the prose criteria it might need some native speaker assistance ;)

Thanks, Todor→Bozhinov 12:02, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments I've begun making various minor copyedits to improve the use of English. My major nitpick concerns the citing of sources: you mention the name of books with their authors etc. in the citation, while they should be brought together in the "References" section. Please see WP:CITE on listing and formatting sources & cites. Furthermore, you mention several medieval writers, e.g. Scylitzes or Stephen of Taron, with page numbers. Which edition/language/year do these pages come from? Sources must be clearly given, so that one could verify them. Also, it would be good to include more English-language sources and citations (as this is the English WP, they would be easier to verify). Oh, and the tone of the article is a bit too anti-Byzantine at places. I'll try to make it more neutral. Otherwise, good work. Constantine ✍ 11:45, 21 October 2008 (UTC)