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WinRed[edit]

I've tried filling out this article, and it's getting there, with decent content coverage and good viewership! Please suggest any improvements that could further improve article quality.

Thanks, Jlevi (talk) 03:15, 8 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Jlevi, hope your staying well! I'd love to take this on, I'll be looking into it! -- puddleglum2.0 04:20, 12 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Lede
 Done By WP:Honorifics, should 'president' be included at all? Jlevi (talk) 01:29, 13 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I would include it; to the few people who may be from non-US countries and unaware of President Trump, it might help. I think WP:HONORIFICS would prevent the use of president throughout the article, but for a first appearances I think it's reasonable.
  • built to compete with the Democratic platform ActBlue... is it the Democratic platform? That would imply that it is the only platform, which I doubt. Probably should be changed from the to a.
Product Details
  • Capitilize national Republican Committee to National Republican Committee, as national is in the name I believe.
I swapped out
  • merges --> merged
 Done Jlevi (talk) 02:01, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • I couldn't actually see any citations for the claim that it was built to compete with ActBlue; I'm sure it was but that's something that's good to get a citation for.
 Done Jlevi (talk) 02:01, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
History
  • notes --> noted
 Done Jlevi (talk) 02:03, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • was this built to oppose ActBlue, implying it was made to eliminate or actively fight ActBlue, or rather to gain the same advantage that ActBlue granted the Democrats?
Is "WinRed was built to allow Republicans to compete with this capacity" any clearer? Jlevi (talk) 02:03, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
It's clearer, but I might change that to something like "WinRed was built to gain the same advantage ActBlue had brought the Democrats." -- puddleglum2.0 16:58, 16 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would link to the Patriots, for those that don't follow football (me) :)
 Done Jlevi (talk) 02:03, 15 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]