Talk:Neville–Neville feud/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 02:07, 1 November 2016 (UTC)

Will come back shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 02:07, 1 November 2016 (UTC)

• I can observe over the entire article that full-stop is placed inside apostrophes (' '), in this way ('XYAYAYAYYAYAY.'^[ref]). But this is wrong. It must be outside, because it is the end for the whole sentence not just in-apostrophe text. It is to be — 'XYAYAYAYYAYAY'.^[ref] This needs correction over the entire article.
• The referencing style must be changed. The long references must be moved to a new references section, and citations must be short of the just mentioning the author's last name, year, pages, or {{Sfn}} also may be used in the place. This is makes the citations clearer. For examples, see, Battle of Wareo, Battle of Isurava, Gallipoli Campaign, Bougainville counterattack.
• Section 1; para 1; Mention who is "Michael Hicks". A historian, author or something.
• Section 1; para 2; In "His next marriage (only five months after Margaret's death)", remove "only" per WP:NPOV. "only" is something like criticizing him.
• Section 1; para 2; In "a cousin of the King, Richard II", commoa (,) after "King" is not necessary.
• Section 1; para 3; Mention who is "A.J. Pollard"
• Section 1; para 4; Mention who is "Charles Ross"
• Section 1; para 4; The entire sentence following "Charles Ross, on the other hand" needs revision. It is a bit confusing. May be split it than one single sentence.
• Section 2; para 2; Correct the word "importanct" to whatever it is to be.
• Section 2; para 2; Mention who is "J.R. Lander"
• Section 2; para 3; Mention who is "R.A. Griffiths"
• Section 2; para 4; Mention who is "R.L. Storey"

• Section 2; para 4; There is no such word as "enfeooffing"
• Section 3; para 1; Why is the entire para presented in italics. If it is some kind of text from a deed, present it using {{Quote}}.
• Section 3; para 2; If "J.R. Lander" is notable and an article doesn't exist, then it is to be red-linked on the first mention in the 2nd para of Section 2, but not here.

• Section 3; para 2; I prefer rewording "described the Neville- Neville feud as illustrating how the Neville family" to "described the Neville- Neville feud as an illustration how the Neville family", also use emdash between Neville and Neville

• Lead needs expansion, and also the infobox needs additional parameters that are to be added (if available).

Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:22, 6 November 2016 (UTC)