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=== Lede ===
=== Lede ===
* Swap em dashes for commas around "also known as the Ballvé Case (Spanish: Caso Ballvé)"
* Swap em dashes for commas around "also known as the Ballvé Case (Spanish: Caso Ballvé)"
: Done
* "whose content" {{right arrow}} "the contents of which"
* "whose content" {{right arrow}} "the contents of which"
: Done


=== Background ===
=== Background ===
==== Political and military context ====
==== Political and military context ====
* {{tq|in the context of the Second World War, in which the country maintained its neutrality.}} fragment
* {{tq|in the context of the Second World War, in which the country maintained its neutrality.}} fragment
: Done
* "and '''the''' party system"
* "and '''the''' party system"
: Done
* "Thanks to the coup" {{right arrow}} "Under Uriburu's coup"
* "Thanks to the coup" {{right arrow}} "Under Uriburu's coup"
: Done
* "was '''declared''' the winner"
* "was '''declared''' the winner"
: Done
* "spin-off" {{Right arrow}} "offshoot"
* "spin-off" {{Right arrow}} "offshoot"
: Done


==== Gay culture in Buenos Aires ====
==== Gay culture in Buenos Aires ====
* Delink "turn of the century" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
* Delink "turn of the century" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
: Done
* "name by which they were also referred to." {{Right arrow}} "a name which also came to describe its speakers."
* "name by which they were also referred to." {{Right arrow}} "a name which also came to describe its speakers."
: Done
* Delink "effeminate" and "amoral" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
* Delink "effeminate" and "amoral" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
: Done
* Comma after "sought to modernize the country"
* Comma after "sought to modernize the country"
: Done
* Delink "cliché" and "aristocrat" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
* Delink "cliché" and "aristocrat" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
: Done


=== Ballvé Piñero's parties ===
=== Ballvé Piñero's parties ===
* "eighteen years younger" {{Right arrow}} "18 years his junior"
* "eighteen years younger" {{Right arrow}} "18 years his junior"
: Done
* Delink "vice" and "(substance) abuse" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
* Delink "vice" and "(substance) abuse" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
: Done
* "name which alluded to the" {{right arrow}} "named for the"
* "name which alluded to the" {{right arrow}} "named for the"
: Done
* Swap colon for comma after "in his own words"
* Swap colon for comma after "in his own words"
: Done
* "In medical experts" {{Right arrow}} "To medical experts"
* "In medical experts" {{Right arrow}} "To medical experts"
: Done


=== Investigation and arrest ===
=== Investigation and arrest ===
* "him seduce other cadets" {{Right arrow}} "as he seduced other cadets"
* "him seduce other cadets" {{Right arrow}} "as he seduced other cadets"
: Done
* Delink "birthday party", "discharge", and "lawsuit" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
* Delink "birthday party", "discharge", and "lawsuit" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
: Done
* "one hundred and twenty-one" {{Right arrow}} "121" per [[MOS:NUM]]
* "one hundred and twenty-one" {{Right arrow}} "121" per [[MOS:NUM]]
: Done


=== Impact ===
=== Impact ===
==== Society and politics ====
==== Society and politics ====
* "the <s>public</s> rumor ahd begun to spread around the general public"
* "the <s>public</s> rumor ahd begun to spread around the general public"
: Done
* "about who the men involved were" {{Right arrow}} "the identities of the men involved"
* "about who the men involved were" {{Right arrow}} "the identities of the men involved"
: Done
* "a big street fighting occurred" {{right arrow}} "a large street fight" without the WL
* "a big street fighting occurred" {{right arrow}} "a large street fight" without the WL
: Done
* "a number that parodied" {{right arrow}} "a number parodying"
* "a number that parodied" {{right arrow}} "a number parodying"
: Done
* comma for em dash after "June 4, 1943,"
* comma for em dash after "June 4, 1943,"
: Done


==== Ensuing gay persecution ====
==== Ensuing gay persecution ====
* "Goodwin was apprehend the same day as his friend," {{right arrow}} "Goodwin was apprehended the same day as his friend"
* "Goodwin was apprehend the same day as his friend," {{right arrow}} "Goodwin was apprehended the same day as his friend"
: Done
* "the age of majority until July—which was 22 years old at the time—" ((right arrow)) "the age of majority (which, at the time, was 22 years old) until July"
* "the age of majority until July—which was 22 years old at the time—" ((right arrow)) "the age of majority (which, at the time, was 22 years old) until July"
: Done
* Delink "bestseller" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
* Delink "bestseller" per [[MOS:OVERLINK]]
: Done
* "but rather "being" homosexual, becoming a cause of discharge from the army." {{right arrow}} "but rather simply "being" homosexual was now a cause for discharge."
* "but rather "being" homosexual, becoming a cause of discharge from the army." {{right arrow}} "but rather simply "being" homosexual was now a cause for discharge."
: Done


=== Legacy ===
=== Legacy ===
* "that the scandal '''opened''' "ajar the door...""
* "that the scandal '''opened''' "ajar the door...""
: Done
* "he got access" {{right arrow}} "he received access"
* "he got access" {{right arrow}} "he received access"
: Done
* "more than two hundred" {{Right arrow}} "more than 200" per [[MOS:NUM]]
* "more than two hundred" {{Right arrow}} "more than 200" per [[MOS:NUM]]
: Done


=== References ===
=== References ===
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Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. — '''[[User:GhostRiver|<span style="font-family:Georgia; color:#BEBFC5">Ghost</span>]][[User talk:GhostRiver|<span style="font-family:Georgia; color:#89CFF0">River</span>]]''' 19:18, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. — '''[[User:GhostRiver|<span style="font-family:Georgia; color:#BEBFC5">Ghost</span>]][[User talk:GhostRiver|<span style="font-family:Georgia; color:#89CFF0">River</span>]]''' 19:18, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

: {{u|GhostRiver}}, thank you for taking a look. I've made the corrections. Let me know if everything's ok! --[[User:Rumba Samba Mambo|ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠]] ([[User talk:Rumba Samba Mambo|talk]]) 18:31, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

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I will be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 16:40, 16 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lede

  • Swap em dashes for commas around "also known as the Ballvé Case (Spanish: Caso Ballvé)"
Done
  • "whose content" → "the contents of which"
Done

Background

Political and military context

  • in the context of the Second World War, in which the country maintained its neutrality. fragment
Done
  • "and the party system"
Done
  • "Thanks to the coup" → "Under Uriburu's coup"
Done
  • "was declared the winner"
Done
  • "spin-off" → "offshoot"
Done

Gay culture in Buenos Aires

Done
  • "name by which they were also referred to." → "a name which also came to describe its speakers."
Done
Done
  • Comma after "sought to modernize the country"
Done
Done

Ballvé Piñero's parties

  • "eighteen years younger" → "18 years his junior"
Done
Done
  • "name which alluded to the" → "named for the"
Done
  • Swap colon for comma after "in his own words"
Done
  • "In medical experts" → "To medical experts"
Done

Investigation and arrest

  • "him seduce other cadets" → "as he seduced other cadets"
Done
  • Delink "birthday party", "discharge", and "lawsuit" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done
  • "one hundred and twenty-one" → "121" per MOS:NUM
Done

Impact

Society and politics

  • "the public rumor ahd begun to spread around the general public"
Done
  • "about who the men involved were" → "the identities of the men involved"
Done
  • "a big street fighting occurred" → "a large street fight" without the WL
Done
  • "a number that parodied" → "a number parodying"
Done
  • comma for em dash after "June 4, 1943,"
Done

Ensuing gay persecution

  • "Goodwin was apprehend the same day as his friend," → "Goodwin was apprehended the same day as his friend"
Done
  • "the age of majority until July—which was 22 years old at the time—" ((right arrow)) "the age of majority (which, at the time, was 22 years old) until July"
Done
Done
  • "but rather "being" homosexual, becoming a cause of discharge from the army." → "but rather simply "being" homosexual was now a cause for discharge."
Done

Legacy

  • "that the scandal opened "ajar the door...""
Done
  • "he got access" → "he received access"
Done
  • "more than two hundred" → "more than 200" per MOS:NUM
Done

References

  • Good

General comments

  • All pictures used are public domain and relevant
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Copyvio score looks good at 5.7%

Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. — GhostRiver 19:18, 16 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GhostRiver, thank you for taking a look. I've made the corrections. Let me know if everything's ok! --ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠 (talk) 18:31, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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