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*I would consider adding an opening date to the first paragraph to give the reader some context on how old the line is. I know it is in the second paragraph but you need to scroll past the infobox on mobile to get to the second paragraph. |
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*Similarly I would consider adding a very brief reason as to why the line is suspended in the first paragraph. |
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*{{tq|The project is being built}} - perhaps "is ''currently'' being built". |
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*{{tq|construction of two new stations along the way}} - perhaps drop the "along the way". |
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*I am not sure what the guidelines are for putting the currencies as "A$716 million" rather than just "$716 million", I will put a note here so I remember to check. |
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*The current infobox picture looks like the station is under construction. I would consider adding a date to the caption to let the reader know it is a few years old, or perhaps use a different photo. |
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*The infobox says "Closed" 20 November 2023 implying that the line won't reopen, maybe that can be adjusted. |
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Reviewer: Commander Keane (talk · contribs) 08:52, 3 March 2024 (UTC)
I am looking forward to reviewing this article. It is my first GA review. I have lived in Perth previously but I am unfamiliar with the subject. I read and edit on both mobile and desktop so my comments may be influenced by that. I consider suggestions I make to be open to discussion.--Commander Keane (talk) 08:52, 3 March 2024 (UTC)
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Lead + infobox
- I would consider adding an opening date to the first paragraph to give the reader some context on how old the line is. I know it is in the second paragraph but you need to scroll past the infobox on mobile to get to the second paragraph.
- Similarly I would consider adding a very brief reason as to why the line is suspended in the first paragraph.
The project is being built
- perhaps "is currently being built".construction of two new stations along the way
- perhaps drop the "along the way".- I am not sure what the guidelines are for putting the currencies as "A$716 million" rather than just "$716 million", I will put a note here so I remember to check.
- The current infobox picture looks like the station is under construction. I would consider adding a date to the caption to let the reader know it is a few years old, or perhaps use a different photo.
- The infobox says "Closed" 20 November 2023 implying that the line won't reopen, maybe that can be adjusted.