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Index of all requests for feedback

Żądło-Dąbrowski z Dąbrówki h. Radwan

Please look at the article I created on my user space regarding this Polish family of immemorial nobility, Żądło-Dąbrowski z Dąbrówki h. Radwan, which in the 18th century immemorial nobility represented only 5% of the noble population as a whole. Are there notability concerns with it? I referenced and sourced the material I found on the family for verification purposes. The are three known notable members of the family, and the article was written so each member's family and social background would not need to be redundantly explained in each article, as a link would be provided to this article.

Thank you for your time and any feedback. -- Exxess (talk) 22:18, 4 January 2009 (UTC)

Would that page have anything to do with this lengthy AFD? And you seem to have posted your request above after posting a request here on the Drawing Board page for the same article in question. This sort of behavior is very indicative of forum shopping (as the user's response to you on the Drawing Board said). I also agree with the response given there in that you should submit this at Deletion Review, not on this page. Killiondude (talk) 06:00, 9 January 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jxc5/Charles_Lockwood

Please take a look at the article I created on my user space, regarding a historian, journalist - Charles Lockwood who's now known to be a Corporate Sustainability Strategist. I've tried to round up some references like newspaper articles and links. I'm not so sure if I'm headed in the right direction, or it would be approved for posting. Help please. I would truly appreciate your feedbacks. Thank you so much. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jxc5 (talk • contribs) 17:07, 5 January 2009 (UTC)

--Maddali raghavarao (talk) 11:49, 7 January 2009 (UTC)--Maddali raghavarao (talk) 11:49, 7 January 2009 (UTC) Chimakurthy

Chimakutrhy is near to Ongole,headquarters of prakasam district of Andhrapradesh. It is on the routemap of Ongole to kurnool .the route'is very busy one now. From ongole to chimakurthy distance is 22kms only. The chimakurth is mandalheadquarter.

Now the chimakurthy is recognised for its granitequarries in he world. From the 80's onwords the small village changed to multilevelled town. Now the chimakurthy is filled with metro culture.Now the people are belongs to various states and various districts. Here the Galaxy granite stone is main item which is exported to forien countries. Galaxy stones are available only in the area only. so that alloverworld so many people are visiting this aea on their business.

Chimakurthy Seshagirirao is famous educationalist and freedom fighter of this village who is great author of many books. Chimakurthy is also famous for service to people. Here main service rendered by Lionsclub of chimakurthy which is inaugurated on 13/2/1990.The club started by eminent people.Dr.B.jawahar as chartered president and Maddali raghavarao as chartered secretary the club started. 
the chimakurthy is famous for not only Galaxy granites and also temples. Near to chimakurthy there is a temple at Ramatheertham .

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jxc5/Charles_Lockwood

(Re-posting request) Please take a look at the article I created on my user space, regarding a historian, journalist - Charles Lockwood who's now known to be a Corporate Sustainability Strategist. I've tried to round up some references like newspaper articles, or other publications he's quoted on and links for notability purposes. I'm not really sure though if I'm headed in the right direction, or it would be approved for posting. Help please. I would truly appreciate your feedback. Thank you so much. Jxc5 (talk) 13:57, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

You've got a lot of information on that page! Nice. I think it needs to be organized a little more clearly though. A method I always use (on Wikipedia) is to find another topically close article to use as a model for whatever I'm writing about. I don't know any other "sustainability strategist" but I was looking at Ann Coulter's page (a political writer/columnist) to compare yours with. You might want to take a look at how the information on that page is ordered, and try to apply that to the article you're writing. You could pick any biography author biography about an author (is what I meant) to compare to--I just glanced at Coulter's real quick. I can give you a few pointers though...

• You might want to try and shorten the titles (and subtitles) of sections. When section titles are long, it makes the table of contents look jumbled (the first thing I noticed when I came to the page).
• More background information about his early life and personal life would add a lot to the article. The article presents a lot more information about his professional career than anything else as of right now.
• I don't think you need a subsection for each work he's written. It'd be better to format the prose in a flowing manner.
• Things need to flow a little more in the article. Writing things out in prose versus listing things.
• The "Research Projects and Articles" section is a bit lengthy... I know that Ann Coulter's page gives a "Bibliography" section, but this one on Lockwood's page seems a bit lengthy. It could be alright, but I'm just a little unsure if it should be included.
• Good job on providing many inline references. I'm not really sure what the "Secondary References" section is for. Did you use information from those sources in the article? If so, you should probably cite them. If its not information you used, you might want to remove those.

Overall good job. I think it needs a little more work until you move it into the mainspace as an article, but it won't take long at this point. You might want to check out "Your First Article" and "Writing Better Articles" to aid you. Killiondude (talk) 02:51, 11 January 2009 (UTC)

• Killiondude, thank you so much for your feedbacks. Very helpful! =) I've also sent a reply to your talkpage, requesting for some assistance with one problem I'm currently facing. =( Your extra help would truly be appreciated.Jxc5 (talk) 18:37, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

Adding a company to a city list and poroviding their contact info

I am trying to find a way to add a company to the city of Houston Texas, I thought I did it but when I finsihed it was deleted. Please direct me to how I can add the company to a city list and add their description.

Many Thanks....Oldcommguy —Preceding unsigned comment added by Oldcommguy (talk • contribs) 16:37, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

I'll respond on your talk page. This feedback page is a forum to request and give feedback on articles. Killiondude (talk) 20:32, 8 January 2009 (UTC)

There's a common misconception that because it's free-of-charge to edit on Wikipedia, that a business can add links to itself wherever it likes. Actually, Wikipedia is owned by a group that forbids external links to businesses in many cases. From your editing history, adding links to www.xangati.com and www.lovemytool.com to many articles, you are doing precisely what Wikipedia disallows. I understand this may be a disappointment, but Wikipedia is not a promotional platform. I notice most of your edits have been reverted. What you should not do at this point is continue to add those external links. Instead, consider other ways you might contribute to the encyclopedia. Regards, Piano non troppo (talk) 09:45, 13 January 2009 (UTC)

Redgrave and Lopham Fen

Over the last month I have heavily edited this article. As this is the first article I have been a major contributor towards I would appreciate any advice on how to improve it. Thanks. HelioSmith (talk) 18:58, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

What you added is interesting and well-written. My concern that you might be using Wikipedia to further a political agenda, however, was strengthened by your heavy use of www.suffolkwildlife.com as a reference. This leaves the material open to getting an WP:NPOV tag, or perhaps even being deleted entirely by someone who disagrees. Since being neutral is one of Wikipedia's three core content polities, it would be better to recast some of your language slightly so that it is clear that the text is expressing a particular (perhaps very common) point-of-view.

This sentence is a example of *beginning* to depart from Wiki guidelines: "In 1961 the Suffolk Wildlife Trust gained control of the site but limited resources meant the large scale work required couldn't be carried out." If I was a detractor of the Trust, I'd question what "limited resources" meant, and especially what "large scale work required" meant. Required to accomplish what goal? Is there any upper limit for how much money the Trust would be willing to spend? Do all the locals agree about the goals?

Again, just a tad more caution would be appropriate. Overall, yours seems like a very worthwhile contribution. Regards, Piano non troppo (talk) 09:26, 13 January 2009 (UTC)

Auburn Tigers swimming and diving

I created this page a while ago and have been expanding it and editing from time to time. It'd like to improve it and at least get it past "Start Class" but would like outside input. Further, someone put a NPOV tag on it, but would not explain their reasoning behind it on the talk page. Any input would be appreciated. AUburnTiger (talk) 00:55, 21 January 2009 (UTC)