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I want to create this article and want some feedback before I post it

Jeff Stitely is an international award-winning jazz drummer and leader of The Stitely Orchestra. Aside from leading the Stitely Orchestra and running his business "Stitely Entertainment," Jeff is currently a Ravinia Jazz mentor teaching and performing for Chicago Public School students.

Biography

Early Life

Jeff started on a musical path at a young age by winning All State Competitions from ages 8 on. Jeff attended University of Illinois in Champagne to study classical percussion. Jeff has toured internationally with his own jazz quartet and with Chicago jazz icon Patricia Barber. Jeff and his Jazz Quartet recorded 3 CDs, the first of which was awarded "Top 10 Jazz CDS of the Year" by WBEZ & The Chicago Sun Times.

Since moving to Chicago in 1984, Jeff has performed with many great jazz, pop and classical musicians such as, Chick Corea, Wynton Marsalis, Randy Brecker, Eddie Harris, Larry Coryell, “Groove” Holmes, Kathleen Battle, Zoot Sims, Patricia Barber, Von Freeman, Bobby Shew, Bobby Lewis, Ed Peterson, Chicago Symphony’s “Gershwin-Bernstein Ensemble”, Grant Park Symphony, Sinfonieta and Fulcrumpoint.

Ventures

A transformational event in Jeff Stitely's career was when he got the opportunity to study and perform African drumming and dance with Ghanaian master drummer Gideon Foli Alorwoyie for five years. This venerable musical tradition is rooted in tribal rituals surrounding weddings, harvests and initiations. The music was performed to fill these celebrations with rapturous joy. It was in that same spirit that Jeff decided to start "Stitely Entertainment" in 1994, to bring Joy to celebrations.

"Stitely Entertainment" is a company located in Evanston, IL that manages four bands (The Stitely Orchestra, 312 Chicago, Chicago Groove Collective, and the Alan Gresik Swing Shift Orchestra) and provides work for over 80 musicians. "Stitely Entartainment" is owned and managed by jeff Stitely along with five employees and an internship program. "Stitely Entertainment" has been selected to The Knot "Best of Weddings" magazine for both 2008 and 2009.

Stitely Orchestra

The Stitely Orchestra is a 14-piece dance band led by Jeff Stitely. The band's diverse repertoire includes indie, contemporary, rock, R&B, funk, Motown, disco, Big Band, jazz, swing, ethnic, and other music. The Stitely Orchestra prforms throughout the U.S. Among the Venues it has performed at are the House of Blues, Navy Pier and Soldier Field. Some of Stitely Orchestra's past clients include the U.S. Olympic Committee, Australian Consulate, Northwestern University and such Fortune 500 companies as IBM, Kraft and Ford. The Stitely Orchestra performs at more than 140 events a year at every type of occasion ranging from weddings to corporate events.

Discography

1. Chameleon Eyes (1993)
2. All Things Equal (1996)
3. Ennead (1996)

Awards & Accomplishments

• Jeff was the Winner of the Best Soloist Award at the 9th International Jazz Competition of Belgium
• "Top 10 Jazz CDS of the Year" by WBEZ & The Chicago Sun Times
• Awarded two National Endowment for the Arts grants

Addition to "New Orleans" posting

Under "Media" heading, please add OffBeat Magazine, which has been a print publication and website that focuses on the New Orleans and Louisiana music scene since 1988.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Aaron.matt83/Nora_Lustig

Hi there,

I am attempting to create a wikipage for Nora Lustig. I did a user subpage first to see if I could get an expert to review my page.

I have cited everything with reputable sources.

What more do I need to do to push this page to the main entry as Nora Lustig?

Thanks so much!

-Matt Aaron (User:Aaron.matt83) Aaron.matt83 (talk) 16:30, 7 July 2009 (UTC)

University of Valle

Greetings. I've substantially rewritten this article, and I would like that it would be checked in dept, specially in grammar, tone, and structure, before I submit it for a peer review or a good article review. Thanks for any help!!! -Andremun (talk) 16:55, 7 July 2009 (UTC)

Looking good - however, I've just noticed that the first reference links nowhere though. Apart from that - good job :) -- AdamD123 (talk) 03:05, 15 July 2009 (UTC)

RFF - Jake Edwards

I was asked by a senior editor to request a review of this page (regarding notability) before moving it public again. Please let me know if it's ok now. User:Tntdj/Jake Edwards (radio personality) Thanks --Tntdj (talk) 18:44, 7 July 2009 (UTC)

Dragonlance novels dating

Is anyone planning to sort the novels in historical order? Or are they already? Dkphamilton (talk) 00:08, 8 July 2009 (UTC)

RFF User:Tntdj/"Bridging chipset"

I would like to go live with this page. Please let me know if it's ok User:Tntdj/"Bridging chipset".

Thanks --Tntdj (talk) 17:07, 9 July 2009 (UTC)

Educational Assignment: History of the Family

I am not sure if the general talking points make sense. Any help would be appreciated Koliber (talk) 21:44, 9 July 2009 (UTC)

To which article are you referring to? Family history? It would be more helpful if you provided a wikilink. --œ^™ 20:57, 14 July 2009 (UTC)

Byzantine calendar

Hello, I am looking for feedback on the article Byzantine calendar. I have greatly expanded the article including detailed references and bibliography. Looking for overall feedback on it to improve it; would be appreciated; general and specific feedback would both be great. It is a historically based subject, and a Christian based subject, and I would like to ensure the article reads smoothly and is accessible to everyone. A fresh opinion and criticism would be helpful.

Also, on the talk page it is listed as part of 4 wikiprojects, still with no ratings yet. Any idea how or where I go to request a review for each of those specific projects? Any links or pages I should be going to? Also, how do I get the article reviewed by a subject specialist on the Wikipedia Editorial board? Many thanks, :) ΙΣΧΣΝΙΚΑ-888 (talk) 03:04, 11 July 2009 (UTC)

Mehul Patel also known as Mehul Mike Patel

Mehul Patel also known as Mike Patel (born in Bombay, India , 1973), founder of KIPL.Net group companies is a Indian Serial Entrepreneur. He is Co-founder and on Board of various New Media firms Mozomo.mobi, IndyChai.com, KlubQ.com, D7TV.com, PinkElephant.in, maltaficionado.com, BombayCrunch.com

Mehul Patel has within a short span of time created a mark for himself as a New Media consultant of repute. A Masters in New Media from NYU, he has been instrumental in co-founding and managing several innovative enterprises in the New Media space (Web / Wireless) like IndyChai.com – India's first web 2.0 hyper aggregated portal, Mozomo.mobi – a designer mobile content / Mobile VAS firm has been a part of D7TV – a mobile TV start up based out of San Francisco California to name a few. With over a decade of expertise in the field, Mr. Patel's knowledge and skillsets is much sought after not only in India but overseas as well.

He is the Youngest Social and Environmental Activist from Bombay, India. His constant effort to create awareness about betterment of those living in Dharavi Slums and cleaning up of Mithi River is truly commendable.

He is one of the key figures for bringing several environmentalist and activists group leaders under hubs like Mithi RIver Activists.

His constant effort to create awareness about betterment of those living in Dharavi Slums and cleaning up of Mithi River is truly commendable.

He has supported and helped various initiatives for better active governance and Anti Corruption, Anti- terrorist activities under several platforms like YouthRise, JNM, JagrutNagrikManch, Let's Rebuild India. Mehul Patel divides his time between Singapore and Bombay, India. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kajalsharma1234 (talk • contribs) 11:42, 12 July 2009 (UTC)

Bill Weihl (William E. Weihl)

Bill Weihl (William E. Weihl) is currently working on clean energy at Google. Before joining Google in early 2006, he was CTO at Akamai Technologies, where he led efforts to provide customers with more powerful computing capabilities on edge servers. He has also worked on distributed and parallel computing and on cpu architecture, first as a professor at MIT and then as a researcher at DEC's Systems Research Center (SRC).

Citation: High-efficiency power supplies for home computers and servers, Urs Hölzle, Bill Weihl, 2006, pp. 1-3. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kajalsharma1234 (talk • contribs) 11:47, 12 July 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hmlauer/CenPho

Looking for feedback about this page that is about the term used to describe a neighborhood in Central Phoenix. I'd like to get it to the point that it is appropriate to be published as an article on Wikipedia. Thanks. Hmlauer (talk) 20:20, 12 July 2009 (UTC)hmlauer

Helvetia (band)

I would appreciate feedback on this article. I currently have it posted and "under construction" -- and would like to avoid deletion. Jasper.rhodes (talk) 23:15, 14 July 2009 (UTC)Jasper.rhodes

Do not post the entire article here. Just the link to it is enough. Someone will review it shortly. --œ^™ 23:33, 14 July 2009 (UTC)

Utah State Route 143

Just created this article, and while I think it's a pretty good start, I would like to get this up to Good Article status eventually. I'm going to try and get a map created for the infobox. What other improvements would you suggest? Thanks in advance. DeFaultRyan 16:13, 16 July 2009 (UTC)