Talk:Lasioglossum leucozonium

This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Raymundo.marcelo (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Missmanasa.

Review/Suggestions

For this entry, the main corrections I made were concerning the differentiation of specific terms and concepts via italics, as well as the addition of inter-Wiki links. I included italics for several of the genus and species names discussed in the taxonomy and phylogeny section such as “Halictinae.” I also added around 10 inter-Wiki links for words that I felt could require further explanation, such as “protonum,” “hymenopteran,” and “brood.” In addition, I deleted several inter-Wiki links where I saw fit as a result of a lack of a page associated with the terms. For instance, I deleted the links for the species “callizonium,” “zonolum,” and “majus” mentioned in the paragraph on taxonomy and phylogeny. My only suggestion is to consider improving the section on predation as it is currently only one sentence long, and that too a very brief sentence. Other than that, I thought the article was very well written and thorough! Missmanasa (talk) 22:26, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Feedback

Overall, this article is in need of clarification as well as more information in general. In the taxonomy section, saying “there is genetic variation within the species depending on its location” is not particularly informative, as this is true of most species, so this should be elaborated upon to show why it is important. Although interesting, I do not see how stating how its eyes have been studied in relation to that other species is particularly relevant for the description section. The phrase “strongly striate laterally to reticulate medially” in the female description section needs to be explained, because as written it does not make very much sense. There are no citations in the female description section, which is very concerning. In general, this section needs serious editing to make it understandable to a non-expert of bee anatomy. The male section also needs to be changed so that a layperson can understand its contents. The eye section could also use further explanation for the layperson. I am unclear as to what you mean by “sexual brood” in the development section. Do you just mean that the offspring produced are all capable of reproduction? And what do you mean by “after the brood mates?” Do the siblings in the brood mate with each other? It sounds like you may actually be referring to the same event, which is when newly matured females mate and make a new nest. The sections in behavior and ecology are rather redundant, and you repeat information in nesting biology and social organization, and there is information in nesting biology that you already covered in nest structure. Under human importance, you should expand upon how it has “found its niche in nature.” Does this mean it actually has a beneficial effect in North America, rather than being a harmful invasive species? In general, there is far too much descriptive information compared to how sparse all of the other sections are. Mandeljulia (talk) 04:24, 21 October 2015 (UTC)