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Reviewer: Euryalus (talk · contribs) 02:23, 14 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. I'm looking forward to the review. K.e.coffman (talk) 00:35, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, sorry for slight delay - having a busy day. -- Euryalus (talk) 01:44, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I have some comments:

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Suggest using his full name in the first sentence
"the son of General Kurt Hoepner" He was the son of Generaloberst Dr Kurt Hoepner (1858-1925). His father was a physician.
Why not mention his mother, Elisabeth Auguste née Kienast? Or his siblings?
Should Rittmeister be italicised? And Totenkopf?
Link Sudetenland Crisis
"Upon his rival Heinz Guderian's assumption of command of the XIX Corps; Hoepner replaced him as the commander of the XVI Army Corps" Replace the semicolon with a comma. Are we going with "Corps" or "Army Corps"? Pick one. (The former is the usual form in English; Armee Korps is German)
Why not link to the German version XIX Corps [de]?
Operation Barbarossa is linked twice.
The navbox says he cassumed command of the 4th Panzer Group on 15 February 1941
" Such "blinkered thinking" on Hoepner's part was common among the German commanders, which in Stahel's opinion "even before it began, made little practical sense"" Even before what began?
"Panzer Group 3" and "Panzer Group 2" should be "3rd Panzer Group" and "2nd Panzer Group" for consistency.
The last part is the first time you mention his wife Irma née Gebauer, daughter Ingrid and son Felbert, but do not name them
He still has streets named after him

Typos

"Hoepner's Panzer group" should be "Hoepner's panzer group"
"promoted to the rank of Generalmajor" should be "generalmajor"
"Panzer unit" should be "panzer unit"
"the rank of Generaloberst" should be "generaloberst"
"The 4th Panzer group headed" should be "The 4th Panzer Group headed"
"the 4th Panzer Group group" should be "4th Panzer Group"
"air corp" should be "air corps"
"Hoepner pursued a policy of scorched earth, demanding "ruthless and complete destruction of the enemy."" It is in the source, but that's not what scorched earth means.
" the south flank of the 4th army" should be " the south flank of the 4th Army"

Hawkeye7 (discuss) 23:42, 11 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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 *Thank you. I'm looking forward to the review. [[User:K.e.coffman|K.e.coffman]] ([[User talk:K.e.coffman|talk]]) 00:35, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
 :Hi, sorry for slight delay - having a busy day. -- [[User:Euryalus|Euryalus]] ([[User talk:Euryalus|talk]]) 01:44, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
+I have some comments:
+; Text:
+* Suggest using his full name in the first sentence
+* "the son of General Kurt Hoepner" He was the son of Generaloberst Dr Kurt Hoepner (1858-1925). His father was a physician.
+* Why not mention his mother,   Elisabeth Auguste {{nee|Kienast}}? Or his siblings?
+* Should ''Rittmeister'' be italicised? And ''Totenkopf''?
+* Link [[Sudetenland Crisis]]
+* "Upon his rival Heinz Guderian's assumption of command of the XIX Corps; Hoepner replaced him as the commander of the XVI Army Corps" Replace the semicolon with a comma. Are we going with "Corps" or "Army Corps"? Pick one. (The former is the usual form in English; ''Armee Korps'' is German)
+* Why not link to the German version {{ill|XIX Corps (Wehrmacht)|lt=XIX Corps|de|XIX. (II. Königlich Sächsisches) Armee-Korps}}?
+* [[Operation Barbarossa]] is linked twice.
+* The navbox says he cassumed command of the 4th Panzer Group on 15 February 1941
+* " Such "blinkered thinking" on Hoepner's part was common among the German commanders, which in Stahel's opinion "even before it began, made little practical sense"" Even before ''what'' began?
+* "Panzer Group 3" and "Panzer Group 2" should be "3rd Panzer Group" and "2nd Panzer Group" for consistency.
+* The last part is the first time you mention his wife Irma {{nee|Gebauer}}, daughter Ingrid and son Felbert, but do not name them
+* He still has streets named after him
+;Typos:
+* "Hoepner's Panzer group" should be "Hoepner's panzer group"
+* "promoted to the rank of Generalmajor" should be "generalmajor"
+* "Panzer unit" should be "panzer unit"
+* "the rank of Generaloberst" should be "generaloberst"
+* "The 4th Panzer group headed" should be "The 4th Panzer Group headed"
+* "the 4th Panzer Group group" should be "4th Panzer Group"
+* "air corp" should be "air corps"
+* "Hoepner pursued a policy of scorched earth, demanding "ruthless and complete destruction of the enemy."" It is in the source, but that's not what scorched earth means.
+* " the south flank of the 4th army" should be " the south flank of the 4th Army"
+: [[User:Hawkeye7|<span style="color:#9933ff">Hawkeye7</span>]] [[User_talk:Hawkeye7|<span style="font-size:80%">(discuss)</span>]] 23:42, 11 March 2018 (UTC)