Talk:Archean felsic volcanic rocks

Peer Feedback from Jupiter

Feedback from Jupiter

Your page about "Archean felsic volcanic rocks" is well organized with simple language and clear diagrams. Every piece of information is supported by citations.

Here are some suggestions for your page:

1. Instead of showing an animation of Archean felsic volcanism in the introduction, it may be better to put a picture of Archean felsic volcanic rocks (if available) or just a felsic rock sample picture. Your audience may then have a direct idea of what you are talking about, and then put the conceptual diagrams in the following part.

2. You may want to enlarge the text size in your diagram, such as Figure. 4.

3. In the "Occurrence" section, a picture showing one of the region may be good, such as Pilbara Craton.

Own Review Notes after First Draft

Content

• Need more explanation on REE, and their difference with modern felsic volcanics
• perhaps it's better to explain more on crustal implication

Writing the page

I think it is hard to write a Wiki page, as a person who struggle with expressing thoughts. At first I wrote an introduction and gave it to 10 friends, nobody was interested in my article. They all thought this term is very difficult to understand. So, simply they are not interested at all.

I then listened to some suggestions from student assistants and a friend who is excellent in communication. The original introduction was completely changed. Instead of explaining technical terms, I tried to draw readers' interest by simplifying the content and stressing the importance of the subject.

Some people started to understand what my article is dealing with, as well as they thought it is getting more interesting. I think the communication worked after some changes. However, meantime I am worried that some contents or ideas are improperly delivered. Until now, I am not confident of my writing enough yet. I still believe this project helps me building up my confidence in some sort of ways.

Ivancyyip (talk) 09:41, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer review from Kevin

Hi Ivan,

Archean felsic volcanic rock is an interesting topic. I appreciate your great efforts in putting pieces of information together to introduce this complicated topic in a well-structured and simple way.

Suggestions:

1. It might be better if there are annotated photos of a typical AFV to make it more tangible and at the same time to help audience truly “visualise” this rare rock type. (esp. on mineralogy and texture part)

2. A few lines might be added in the beginning of “relationship between AFV and granitoids” to give the audience a general picture on why this part is there.

3. Perhaps a simple example of dating of AFV can be added to introduce how it works actually?

Cheers, Kevin

Kevnmh (talk) 16:19, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from George

hard to pick out improvements, very thorough stuff

• it may not be clear to the average reader what the page is describing, especially early on. start from pretty basic knowledge
• could the annotations on the last diagram be a little clearer? appreciate its hard because it being hand drawn. maybe just make the image larger
• a comparison to the nature and style of modern day volcanism could be beneficial as well