Talk:Pisaurina mira

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 September 2020 and 17 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Dyklee (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Dgoldblum, RenaBio472, Davidcho122.

Edits

I have revised this Wikipedia page as of 10/20/20 in the following ways: 1. I have edited and added more information to the introduction, removing any citations that were incomplete, and providing more general information about Pisaurina mira. 2. I have added images from Wikimedia Commons with a brief description. I did not add descriptions to the two photos above the Taxonomy box as the photos themselves did not have a description. 3. I have added 14 new categories, ranging from general Description to Contribution to Ecosystem. 4. I have added footnotes to appropriate places. Please feel free to edit any of my work as you deem appropriate. Dyklee (talk) 00:45, 21 October 2020 (UTC)

Behavioral Ecology Student Suggestions

I found this article to be really thorough and well-written! I did add in one very short section, Webs, because the nursery web is mentioned in the Lead section and in Reproduction but didn't have its own section. If there is more information about webs in the literature, I think this section could also benefit from being expanded. I also added in hyperlinks to other Wikipedia articles on some words that I thought would be interesting to read more about or that readers might want clarification on. Overall, I thought that this was a really good and well-written article. I especially found the Lead and Mating sections to be really interesting and thorough. RenaBio472 (talk) 00:26, 28 October 2020 (UTC)

Behavioral Ecology Student Suggestions

You wrote a very well rounded, well-written article! I made a few grammatical and word changes just to better help the flow of the article. My main comments revolve around the habitat and diet sections. For the habitat section, the Geographic Range subheading had a confusing sentence that I would recommend revising. The sentence about the locations of the spider in the US was a bit clunky and I was not sure if you were describing the range between states or where in the states the spiders are found. Maybe clarifying from Florida too west texas for example would help the article. I did not make any changes there because I did not want to accidently add any incorrect information about the spider's range. In regards to the diet section, the sentence regarding venom seemed to be conflating venom and digestive juices. I believe that those are typically two separate things. Venom is used to immobilize prey while the digestive juices break down its inside. If in this spider they are the same, say so! And if they are not I would recommend putting them into 2 sepperate sentences. The mating section was incredibly well written and thorough great job! Dgoldblum (talk) 20:46, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

Behavioral Ecology Student Suggestions

I really enjoyed reading your article! I corrected a few grammatical inconsistencies like pronoun references. I also took the liberty of removing a few words that seemed to interrupt the flow of the article. I would recommend that you shorten the length of your lead section as it seems relatively long. Perhaps, you could move some information into a description section. For the geographic location, I moved the statement about being the most common species in eastern United States to that section. I also think it would be beneficial to specify “west to Texas, and north to Kansas and Minnesota.” Also, I don’t believe the comparison to the wolf spider would be necessary. Overall, the article was really informative and very well-written! davidcho122 (talk) 20:46, 3 November 2020 (UTC)