Wikipedia:Peer review/My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic/archive7
My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic
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I've listed this article for peer review because this article has had a recently failed FAC nomination due to lack of engagement and I would still like to get it to FA-status. All feedback welcome.
Thanks, Pamzeis (talk) 00:39, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
Comments by Z1720
Hi Pamzeis, I am sorry that the article was archived after we worked together on the PR. I suggest that you seek out a mentor at WP:FAM, and find someone who has experience working in pop culture. You can also ask editors on their talk pages to comment here: since this is a PR you can seek help from specific editors without worries that you are canvassing for FAC support. I also encourage you to continue reviewing at FAC so that you can get ideas on how to make your article better. Let me know if you have any questions or concerns. Z1720 (talk) 15:23, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
Commends by Laser brain
I will try to look at this before it goes back to FAC. --Laser brain (talk) 12:30, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
- @Laser brain: Courtesy ping. Pamzeis (talk) 14:19, 10 November 2021 (UTC)
- I'm still reading through, but I've encountered at least one present tense phrase that may have been added to the article while the show was still in production: "Libman stated she is allowed be as exaggerated as she wants without the animators stopping her". The article should be scanned and adjusted for past tense. --Laser brain (talk) 21:09, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
- Can we find a better source than BusinessWeek for our opening statement of the central themes of the show? I'd prefer something geared toward media journalism or academic study. --Laser brain (talk) 21:42, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
Comments by Wizzito
- I suggest that the lead section, "Premise", "Cast and characters", "Casting and voice acting", "Fandom", "Other media", and "Fifth generation" be expanded a bit, if possible.
- Can you be more specific? The lead section is already three paragraphs, which is acceptable per MOS:LEADLENGTH; the premise covers the basic, well, premise of the show and most of the series is stand-alone and any season arcs or stuff like that can be covered in season-specific articles; I have been unable to find any more encyclopaedic information from reliable sources on casting and voice acting; the fandom already has its own article which is longer than this one so if anyone wants to read about it they can go to the other article; I'm hesitant about expanding #Other media because, since there are so many notable spin-offs, etc., it could risk getting bloated; with the fifth generation, the only part that is relevant to this is that it's set in the same universe. I've added a bit but please note there's not much media at the moment, only a film and a bunch of toys, and that this generation of the franchise only started earlier this year.
- Those sentences in "Cast and characters" could use some periods at the end, and possibly some wikilinks for context...
- ...why? There are no full sentences and everything relevant is already linked in #Premise
- "Critical reception" could also use some wikilinks for context.
- I don't really know what can be linked. Everything that isn't either already has been or doesn't need to be, IMO.
- Is iTunes a reliable source, as seen in source 104?
- It's a WP:PRIMARY source; we're using iTunes to reference that fact that Friendship Is Magic is on iTunes
wizzito | say hello! 22:56, 11 November 2021 (UTC)
- Hi, Wizzito. I have responded to the above. Thank you for your comments and please feel free to leave any more. Pamzeis (talk) 04:21, 12 November 2021 (UTC)
- Eh, it's hard for me to explain about what exactly I think needs improving without using a lot of words. I retract my comments about the lengths of certain sections, though. wizzito | say hello! 04:24, 12 November 2021 (UTC)