Talk:Hollyhock Retreat

I find it objectionable the mention of CEO Dana Bass and her husband Joel solomon of Renewal Partners. This is a commercial Promotion to inhance Renewal Partners investment objectives In my opinion.

I could add some factual information to "Hollyhock Retreat" like a memorial to "Sue Saunders" who worked at Hollyhock Retreat for 25 years and died in POVERTY.

I think Wikipedia is not a forum for deceitful commercial promotions. I've tried to keep the edit clean and simple.

I suggest you read what is not vandalism. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 207.102.153.51 (talk)

Thank you for explaining your multiple deletions of the same content. It is much more useful to have this discussion and understand why you were taking those editing actions so that we can reach consensus about what is and is not appropriate for inclusion in the article. I do not find it to be promotional to list the executive management of an organization in an article about the organization. In fact, that is common practice on Wikipedia. If you have additional information to add regarding Hollyhock that comes from reliable sources, then by all means please do add it. The article currently does not have much information, and any additional information to expand it that comes from reliable sources would be a most welcome addition. ConcernedVancouverite (talk) 18:07, 8 March 2010 (UTC)

It appears that you have again continued to make the same deletions. I do not want to engage in an edit war, so I will post the content that you have repeatedly deleted here so that consensus can be reached about the appropriateness of inclusion. The statements that have been deleted are, "The CEO is Dana Bass Solomon," and "and the current volunteer president is her husband, Joel Solomon. Mr. Solomon is president of Renewal Partners which was a financial backer of Happy Planet Foods, Inhance Investment Management, and Capers Markets." If you can explain how you feel that listing the executive management of an organization is "deceitful commercial promotion" it would be helpful to understand your point of view. ConcernedVancouverite (talk) 18:19, 8 March 2010 (UTC)

Response to Third Opinion Request:

Disclaimers: I am responding to a third opinion request made at WP:3O. I have made no previous edits on Hollyhock Retreat and have no known association with the editors involved in this discussion. The third opinion process (FAQ) is informal and I have no special powers or authority apart from being a fresh pair of eyes. Third opinions are not tiebreakers and should not be "counted" in determining whether or not consensus has been reached. My personal standards for issuing third opinions can be viewed here.

Opinion: Retain the sentence which reads, "The CEO is Dana Bass Solomon, and the current volunteer president is her husband, Joel Solomon." Delete the sentence which reads, "Mr. Solomon is president of Renewal Partners which was a financial backer of Happy Planet Foods, Inhance Investment Management, and Capers Markets." The names of the CEO and President are marginally useful information for this article. The information about Mr. Solomon is not. That would be true, and alone enough reason to delete it, even if the article were much longer and more detailed, but as it is, including it violates WP:UNDUE. I think that this article would also have a better chance of surviving a notability deletion proposal — for which it would appear to be at some risk — without that information. Let me finally note that the reverting needs to stop. Though WP:3RR hasn't yet been violated per se, an edit war doesn't have to violate 3RR to be an edit war. Leave the article as it is and work it out here on the talk page. If you can't do that, do a request for comments, take it to Mediation Cabal, or something similar, but don't just keep reverting back and forth.

What's next: Once you've considered this opinion click here to see what happens next.—TRANSPORTERMAN (TALK) 21:31, 8 March 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for your quick third opinion, TransporterMan. I can accept your proposed solution. Thank you for your time. ConcernedVancouverite (talk) 21:39, 8 March 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for your opinion TransporterMan.

I can agree with Delete the sentence which reads, "Mr. Solomon is president of Renewal Partners which was a financial backer of Happy Planet Foods, Inhance Investment Management, and Capers Markets."

It appears ConcernedVancouverite is willing to as well. Thanks for your time. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 207.102.153.107 (talk) 23:44, 8 March 2010 (UTC)

Discussion of edits 05-22-13

Quick explanation here:

First: My edits in the info section read '... on topics including wellness and wisdom practices, arts and culture, business and leadership development[3], relationships, nonviolent communication, Tibetan Buddhism, yoga, holistic health, integrative medicine, kayaking, leadership,[2] and social ventures.[4]'

The edits that ConcernedVancouverite has reverted to read '... on topics including animal communication, relationships, nonviolent communication,[3] spiritual chanting,[3] Tibetan Buddhism, Kabbalah,[4] yoga, morphic resonance, holistic health, integrative medicine, leadership,[2] and social ventures.[5]'

These are fairly similar - I do not see a reference for 'animal communication' anywhere, which was why I removed it. However, the items I added - arts and culture, business and leadership development, kayaking - are all sourced from ref #10, so those should remain.

Second: on the Political section, I find the Hollyhock Mafia/Vancouver City Hollyhock mention a little out of place. There are several sources in which the Hollyhock Mafia/Vancouver City Hollyhock names are mentioned, but out of five, three are newspaper articles that simply mention the fact, and the only two that actually directly apply those names appear to both be the City Caucus blog. Upon further investigation, this appears to be a partisan blog on city politics favourable to the city party currently in opposition to the Mayor's party, thus using this blog as a primary source is inherently biased.

While City Caucus may certainly have valid concerns, I am not sure that the Wikipedia page is the place to air them, or that they are relevant here. Including these as references introduces bias in itself, since City Caucus is the only outlet to actually use the Mafia/City Hollyhock names, and they only represent one side of politics.

Not only this, as City Caucus is a blog (evident from just the front page, which as of 5/22/2013 clearly states that it is a retired blog) as far as I understand, it does not pass Wikipedia's criteria for reliable sources.

Neither do the Hollyhock Mafia/City Hollyhock names: in fact, reference #10 (a link to a blog post reposting an official Vancouver Sun article) explicitly states that Bloggers have dubbed Cambie and 12th Avenue as "Vancouver City Hollyhock" or the "Hollyhock mafia."

On top of the above, Hollyhock is a retreat, much like the Omega Institute - not a political organization. Mentioning that several City Hall staffers have at some point in their lives had connections to Hollyhock would be akin to saying they had connections to UBC Engineering.

ConcernedVancouverite, I look forward to your response. Mountaincaribou (talk) 03:45, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

Your edits were reverted because you deleted a large chunk of cited content. If you would like to modify the initial description to add the various components you are talking about that they feature at Hollyhock that sounds appropriate to do. Both the Vancouver Sun and Globe and Mail have reported on the tight politican connections between Hollyhock, Solomon, and the Vision Vancouver party in cites such as these: [1] and [2] so it seems worthy of mentioning, and does not seem appropriate to remove reliably source content. As we can't delete it, what language change do you propose to it? ConcernedVancouverite (talk) 14:09, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for your comments. OK, I will revert the list of activities to the combination of your and my lists.

Re the politician connections, I am not convinced that we can't delete it, to be honest. The Globe and Mail simply says 'But he shudders when the two of them are jokingly referred to as part of the Hollyhock mafia around Mr. Robertson', and does not label them that directly. The Vancouver Sun says 'But city hall watchers on websites such as citycaucus. com, founded by Daniel Fontaine, chief of staff to former NPA Mayor Sam Sullivan, have raised concerns about a half dozen or so new hires at city hall having ties to Hollyhock. Bloggers have dubbed Cambie and 12th Avenue as "Vancouver City Hollyhock" or the "Hollyhock mafia."'

The Sun seems clear in stating that bloggers have come up with these terms, and that bloggers have applied them. But the newspapers (which are certainly reliable sources as you say!) have done nothing but comment on the blogs' comments, which are naturally biased, as blogs tend to be! That's why I'm not sure this counts as being worthy of inclusion - i.e. the newspapers have only reported on what bloggers are saying... and bloggers aren't reliable sources. Hence the UBC engineering reference... bloggers could say that too, and newspapers might mention it, but it's not necessarily relevant. would that make sense?

Mountaincaribou (talk) 15:06, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

Generally the criteria around discussing the notability and appropriateness of including things that happen in blogs and other types of similar sources is that once they are covered in reliable sources (if the blogs themselves are determined to be non-reliable, which is not the case here even) that they are notable. Not that it matters in this case as there is coverage in traditional newspapers, but in this particular case it appears that the blog in question is also categorized as a potentially reliable source on its own even without coverage in other reliable sources. But that would be up for discussion on a reliable sources noticeboard. ConcernedVancouverite (talk) 18:17, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

OK, noted on traditional coverage, though I am still not sure that City Caucus can be considered a potentially reliable Wiki source (is there another place where that has been discussed? Where is it considered reliable?)

There is still also the question of bias, since it is a partisan blog. Even though these political links have been reported on by the G&M / Sun, I'm a little uncomfortable with the fact that they literally only come from one, partisan, source, so I feel like we should at the very least acknowledge and clarify that. City Hall is pretty big - is it really that surprising that several people have been to Hollyhock? Mountaincaribou (talk) 06:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

City Caucus has received significant independent reliable source coverage about its importance for Vancouver politics, so it is a reliable source. Yet you are correct that it seems to have a political slant. On the use of potentially biased reliable sources, there is a blurb here Wikipedia:Rs#Biased_or_opinionated_sources you may wish to refer to. What language do you propose to clarify the article? ConcernedVancouverite (talk) 15:11, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

Sorry, busy weekend and spring cleaning. OK, here's what I propose. For political language:

Several holders of political positions, including several Vancouver City Hall staffers, have attended Hollyhock programs in the past. The spectrum of attendees typically includes a wide range of people, from civic leaders and environmental activists to business executives.

For Hollyhock description:

Hollyhock Retreat is a holiday and/or lifelong learning and leadership institute based on Cortes Island, British Columbia, Canada, with a satellite campus in Vancouver. It is renowned for its natural beauty and offers a variety of workshops, classes, and peer learning conferences such as the Social Venture Institute.

Its main Cortes Island location is situated on the sunniest southeastern beach of the island, and offers a range of personal, spiritual, and professional development programs on topics including relationship building, cooking, creative writing, nonviolent communication, kayaking, Buddhism, yoga, holistic health, integrative medicine, business and community leadership, and social ventures. It was created in 1982 on the grounds of the former Cold Mountain Institute.

As a large employer at its campus on a small remote island approximately 100 km from Vancouver, Hollyhock is both appreciated and sometimes held in question by its local community.

All of this would obviously be sourced correctly in the actual article. Mountaincaribou (talk) 07:31, 28 May 2013 (UTC)

A lot of that phrasing sounds promotional in nature, and more like an ad. Also it removes well cited content. ConcernedVancouverite (talk) 15:50, 28 May 2013 (UTC)

Really? I pulled it from a bunch of articles that I found while googling, so I thought it was fairly factual. I can tone down the first para of the description though - upon reading again I can see how that sounds promotional, sorry! The second paragraph is pretty much the same as what's there now, with a few additions. And the third paragraph seems to be accurate based on what I've seen (some disgruntled people, some happy people).

How about this for the first para: Hollyhock Retreat is a holiday and/or lifelong learning institute based on Cortes Island, British Columbia, Canada, with a satellite campus in Vancouver. It offers a variety of workshops, classes, and conferences. That seems to fit what is actually offered there.

Which cited content have I removed? I don't have references in the description para right now obviously but as I mentioned I'll add them back in. If you're referring to the political language, as you said the newspapers have noted the tight political links, which seems to be the main point of the section. I'd still cite the same newspapers.Mountaincaribou (talk) 16:48, 28 May 2013 (UTC)

It is difficult to fully understand what you are proposing without the citations you plan to include included in this discussion. I'd suggest you put the full text you propose here, including citations so we can hopefully reach consensus. ConcernedVancouverite (talk) 13:38, 29 May 2013 (UTC)

OK, this is going to be a bit messy since it's on the talk page, but here goes:

Hollyhock Retreat is a holiday, retreat, and/or lifelong learning institute based on Cortes Island, British Columbia, with a satellite campus in Vancouver. Its main Cortes Island location is situated on the sunniest southeastern beach of the island, and offers a range of personal, spiritual, and professional development programs on topics including relationship building, cooking, creative writing,, nonviolent communication,, kayaking, Buddhism, yoga, holistic health, integrative medicine, business and community leadership, and social ventures. It was created in 1982 on the grounds of the former Cold Mountain Institute. As a large employer at its campus on a small remote island approximately 100 km from Vancouver, Hollyhock is both appreciated and sometimes held in question by its local community.

==Political links==

The CEO is Dana Bass Solomon, and the current volunteer president is her husband, Joel Solomon, who has close ties to Vancouver Mayor Gregor Robertson. Several holders of political positions, including several Vancouver City Hall staffers, have attended Hollyhock programs in the past. The spectrum of attendees typically includes a wide range of people, from civic leaders and environmental activists to business executives.

==References==

"Hollyhocks mark the spot for peace and serenity"

"Hollyhock retreat: 'Paradise with purpose'", Surrey Now, May 26, 2009.

"Short Trips: Holistic programs work on body and soul", Seattle Post-Intelligencer, March 21, 2007.

"What the world needs now... is more of Hollyhock on Cortes Island", Getaway BC, July 13, 2010.

"Spiritual retreats on Vancouver Island respond to life's challenges", Canadian Press, May 12, 2009.

Charlie Smith, "Building Hollyhock’s legacy", Georgia Straight, April 26, 2007.

"Hollyhock retreat offers tool for change, hope and optimism", Canwest News Service, June 26, 2009.

"Joined at the hip: The mutually beneficial relationship of a mayor and his closest adviser", Globe and Mail, December 12, 2008.

How big money drives social change Green philanthropists are striving to turn Metro Vancouver into a sustainable nirvana, Vancouver Sun, August 8, 2010.

Mountaincaribou (talk) 00:49, 4 June 2013 (UTC)

Hey ConcernedVancouverite - I didn't hear back from you and it's been almost a week, so I went ahead and made the edits. Hopefully they're ok with you too, otherwise happy to discuss further here. Let me know, thanks!Mountaincaribou (talk) 06:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)