User talk:Wmcscrooge
Any suggestion or critiques are welcome. --Wmcscrooge (talk) 21:40, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
There are a variety of issues with the article. C class is a get start, but here a few things to work on: The tone of the article comes across as promotional. Terms such as "miracle" standout as not exactly encyclopedic, and in general do not come across as neutral. Next, not every paragraph needs to be its own section/subsection. And some of the headers and the section order does not match the Manual of Style (including all of its subparts), and what are the "notes" as the references section is already used for the footnotes? Those are the quick items that standout, with the tone issue being the biggest mark against it. Basically, it needs to be an encyclopedic biography, whereas what is there comes across more as a brochure. Hopefully this helps. Aboutmovies (talk) 05:00, 13 February 2011 (UTC)