Talk:Voices of a Distant Star/GA1

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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri (talk · contribs) 14:18, 6 January 2014 (UTC) I'll take this. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:18, 6 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I forgot to post up this review! I'll have it up tomorrow for sure. Sorry about the delay, this was actually very well done, so there were only a few issues to fix. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 06:15, 7 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: This article is currently being reviewed by the Guild of CopyEditors. The lead and plot have already been re-written in a concise manner. Extremepro (talk) 06:26, 7 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Ha, well that definitely fixes my issues with "the anime proper" on the plot analysis which was poorly written to downright confusing. Still missing the weird flow with "A schoolgirl named Mikako Nagamine is recruited into the UN Space Army to fight in a war against a group" for temporal matters - tense and all that jazz. I'll hold off until the edits are done, since the copyediting goes beyond my ability to fix the prose issues and that the article gets inline for FA's 1A. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 06:30, 7 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]