User talk:Mikeiwata
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:15, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review #1
The Lead Section: The lead section gave a general explanation about what greenwashing is. It provides important background information setting up the reader for the article to go more in depth.
Structure: The sections are in good order, talking about the topic, the usage of greenwashing, history on the topic, then going into the regulation in different countries, and examples. I feel that this is a solid general layout.
Balance: I feel that there weren't any major points left out and the article doesn't really contain anything off topic.
Neutral: The article is neutral in tone and it is all based on fact.
Sources: The sources are solid, all of them are derived from books, journals, reliable websites, and databases. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Tbartlett16 (talk • contribs) 23:14, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review 1
Great article overall, in order to improve the article maybe the layout should be changed in order to add more information. For example, if the article was organized by food types then there could be more detail on the way each type of food is dried (meats, fruit, veggie, etc). There definitely needs to be more information on each food group and the specifics involved.
Also, I'm not sure if Yahoo! Voices is a source that should be used. It might be useful to go into peer-reviewed articles and scientific books about the topic that were used to form the ideas mentioned in this source. This would also be useful because there are not many sources right now.
There is also some unclear wording under "Food Types". Not sure what it is meant by "fruits change character completely when dried"