User:OdysseyOfGrace

Needs Improvement

Performance

• Clearly more information could be provided

• Lead could use more clarity (see later bullet)

• More headers and sections needed to show variety

• Expand upon the existing content in the contents (likely through reorganization)

• Lead is vague with definitions

• Unclear language
• Some minor copyedits needed

Human geography

• The sections need to be more organized

• Could be through fleshing out sections/combining with other sections

• Lots of headers following large chunks of text

• Likely needs reorganization/reformatting of information

Articles to Work on

1. Performance
2. Comic timing
3. Human geography

Feminism in Mexico

The Problem:

• The lead is very long and could be condensed with information bumped into other sections/subsections
• Lead has too much detail
• Sections could use reorganization
• Feminist theory paragraph doesn’t make sense
• List of Notable Figures could be organized instead of being one long list
• Social movements section is awkward and short

Tasks:

• Make Second Wave a section under History (3.2) and move the corresponding years to be subsections to correspond with the lead
• Make new section/subsection for any additional unique info found only in the lead
• Need to put Feminist theory in relation to theory in Mexico

• Put a tag to Feminist theory underneath the header

• Look at History section and look for "issues" to make a new section

• Put info about indigenous women’s rights
• Look to see what can be condensed
• Group events by instances
• The first three sentences in 1990 section could be condensed, a bit off-topic

• Ask about groupings of time in the History section on the talk page
• Move History Section after Feminist Theory, before Gender Rebels

• Save this for last

• Look into people listed on the Notable Figures section

• Model section after that of Feminism in India
• Cite Wikipedia article source for this info

• See if Social movements section is able to be moved or integrated into another section
• Check for bias

The Sims (video game)

The Problem:

• Simplify Expansion packs section to model the Sims 4 Expansion pack section

• See also the Expansion only subsection in existing article

• Expansion pack section also needs verification
• Two sections list similar info and should be reorganized

Tasks:

• Figure out how to organize Gameplay section

• Use Mario Party 3 page and StarCraft page as guides

• Use template for Expansion only subsection to modify current Expansion pack section

• Briefly research to verify that info in this section is correct
• Potentially add citations?
• Compare Sims 4 and StarCraft pages to determine the best course of action

• Determine approach for reorganization

• Expansions only falls under Compilations heading rather than Expansion packs
• See if Expansions only subsection can fall under Expansion packs heading
• Leave Core game with expansions as the only subsection under Compilations heading

• Potentially add a Cultural impact section and reorganize information under Reception

• Use StarCraft page as a reference for this

• Ports and remakes can be moved to expansions and versions