User talk:Jroberson4
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:57, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review - Mosbey
Julia,
Great job on covering a very broad topic. I understand how difficult condensing a topic that can easily encompass an entire semesters worth of classes into a single article. I suggested a few grammatical comments that will help the overall flow of your article. The one thing I would strongly recommend you look into is adding more citations. There were a few times when you made specific statements that I felt should have a citation included with them to give more credibility to the statements. The only reason I suggest this is because a reader who does not have the background information that you do would want to know how you got the information you stated. Second, in the evolution of dog breeds section, reading through some sentences felt a little repetitive, specifically in word choice and structure. I would review that section and see if there is a way you can edit a few sentences. Other than that, great job. I love learning about the history of different dog breeds so I enjoyed reading your article.
Just an fyi, did you know that Great Danes were originally bred to kill hogs? Their large jaws allow them to latch onto a hogs throat and kill with ease. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jmosbey17 (talk • contribs) 17:43, 30 March 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review - Steven Lemp
Good article, Julia! Most of my comments were grammatical changes. My biggest suggestion was that you break up the "Evolution of Dog Breeds" section with subheadings somehow - it's a very big block of text at the moment. It might be too much if you broke it down by each breed you describe, but at the very least that would increase readability. Also with your last "DNA testing" section, I would either give a less detailed overview of the process and focus on why it's done, or get really specific with the process. Right now, something like the sentence about keeping the genetic material at a desired temperature reads a little weird because it doesn't commit either way. Again, great job! - Steven Lemp