Talk:A Hero's Song/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomcat7 (talk · contribs) 12:15, 9 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
File:Dvorak Antonin rodina USA.jpg does not have the full url.

Fixed

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Hey, thanks for taking this on. The article is fairly concise, but there are very few sources on this specific topic, so I think I've done my best to meet the GA criteria. Focus (talk) 13:39, 9 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, I think the article is very comprehensive, considering that the poem is not so famous.

Nice small article, however:

The lead does not fully summarize the article, for example that it was written between August 4 and October 25, 1897.:*Article now contains every fact in the lead. I have also removed citations in the lead that are used elsewhere in the article.
"and was later published in Berlin in 1899" - the exact date?

Unfortunately the sources do not contain the date, only the year.

No spaced m-dashes, per WP:MDASH

Changed to spaced n-dashes.

"This reflects the fact that the piece does not attempt to convey a story," - Could be simply "The piece..."

I've made it more concise, but I think it should still have some sort of link to the preceding sentence.

"poem Ein Heldenleben (A Hero's Life)" - the underlined should be italicized

Done

""I have just received your second work "The Hero's Song"" - "The Hero's Song" should be 'The Hero's Song'

Done

To avoid the note at the end "(referring to The Wild Dove as "the first").[7]:209" You can reword the quote as following: "I have just received your second work "The Hero's Song" and, as with [The Wild Dove], am quite enchanted with it"

Done

" Dvořák was present at the premier and had planned to conduct it himself in with" - strange wording

Fixed

"The piece had ~~been~~ been performed the previous day,"

Fixed

"(see Symphonic poems (Liszt)" - seems to fail WP:YOU

I linked Liszt's conception instead, hopefully this is better.

I think scherzo should not be italicized as being a common word in the music jargon

Done

The sources are very good.--Tomcat (7) 16:21, 9 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review; hopefully I've addressed everything. Focus (talk) 18:09, 9 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]