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*Given that the Red River campaign and the Camden Expedition are linked prominently in prose, hatnote probably isn't necessary. |
*Given that the Red River campaign and the Camden Expedition are linked prominently in prose, hatnote probably isn't necessary. |
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*Would it be possible to include a map showing the military situation? Fine if not ofc. |
*Would it be possible to include a map showing the military situation? Fine if not ofc. |
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** Closest thing that exists on Commons that I'm aware of is [[:File:Red River Campaign map.jpg]] while is unusable because it shows Steele coming down out of what is now Oklahoma for some reason rather than through Arkansas [[User:Hog Farm|Hog Farm]] <sub> ''[[User talk:Hog Farm|Talk]]''</sub> 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC) |
** Closest thing that exists on Commons that I'm aware of is [[:File:Red River Campaign map.jpg]] while is unusable because it shows Steele coming down out of what is now Oklahoma for some reason rather than through Arkansas [[User:Hog Farm|Hog Farm]] <sub> ''[[User talk:Hog Farm|Talk]]''</sub> 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC) |
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*"began a joint operation up the Red River" wouldn't "along" make more sense? "up" implies going upstream, but the forces in Arkansas would be heading downstream towards Louisiana. Looking at the article on the campaign it seems like forces headed in from both directions, so "along" would contextually make more sense here. |
*"began a joint operation up the Red River" wouldn't "along" make more sense? "up" implies going upstream, but the forces in Arkansas would be heading downstream towards Louisiana. Looking at the article on the campaign it seems like forces headed in from both directions, so "along" would contextually make more sense here. |
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** Rephrased both here and in the lead |
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*A map showing the details of the campaign would also be useful (such as the movements from Little Rock to Arkadelphia and the meeting in Prairie D'Ane with troops from Fort Smith). |
*A map showing the details of the campaign would also be useful (such as the movements from Little Rock to Arkadelphia and the meeting in Prairie D'Ane with troops from Fort Smith). |
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** Unfortunately, we lack one and it's beyond my ability to create anything like that. [https://encyclopediaofarkansas.net/media/gen-frederick-steele-army-map-1864-6975/ This exists and is public domain] but is somewhat illegible and I can't imagine that it would be overly useful to a reader even if clearer due to the surrounding area being blank, leaving no context. [[User:Hog Farm|Hog Farm]] <sub> ''[[User talk:Hog Farm|Talk]]''</sub> 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC) |
** Unfortunately, we lack one and it's beyond my ability to create anything like that. [https://encyclopediaofarkansas.net/media/gen-frederick-steele-army-map-1864-6975/ This exists and is public domain] but is somewhat illegible and I can't imagine that it would be overly useful to a reader even if clearer due to the surrounding area being blank, leaving no context. [[User:Hog Farm|Hog Farm]] <sub> ''[[User talk:Hog Farm|Talk]]''</sub> 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC) |
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*"All but one of the steam-powered gristmills in the area had been destroyed; Stelle sent part of the 36th Iowa Infantry Regiment to operate it on April 17." would probably read clearer as "Only one of the steam-powered gristmills in the area remained usable; Stelle sent part of the 36th Iowa Infantry Regiment to operate it on April 17." |
*"All but one of the steam-powered gristmills in the area had been destroyed; Stelle sent part of the 36th Iowa Infantry Regiment to operate it on April 17." would probably read clearer as "Only one of the steam-powered gristmills in the area remained usable; Stelle sent part of the 36th Iowa Infantry Regiment to operate it on April 17." |
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*"quartermaster, Captain Charles A. Henry with" should have either a comma after "Henry", or not one after "quartermaster" |
*"quartermaster, Captain Charles A. Henry with" should have either a comma after "Henry", or not one after "quartermaster" |
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** Added one after Henry |
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*link [[no quarter]] in the quote? |
*link [[no quarter]] in the quote? |
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*The first mention of White Oak Creek implies we should already know what it is. Was that their destination? Should probably mention the name earlier if so. |
*The first mention of White Oak Creek implies we should already know what it is. Was that their destination? Should probably mention the name earlier if so. |
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** I've added a reference earlier - Thayer told Williams that there was probably a lot of forage around White Oak Creek |
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*Fixed a few typos here. |
*Fixed a few typos here. |
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** Thank you! |
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*"Steele did not attempt to aid the foraging party" do we know why? (fine if not ofc) |
*"Steele did not attempt to aid the foraging party" do we know why? (fine if not ofc) |
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** Nobody really seems to know; I've added a statement to this effect sourced to DeBlack 2003b |
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** Eakin's later racist screed [https://www-newspapers-com.wikipedialibrary.idm.oclc.org/image/273087532/?match=1&terms=%22not%20bound%20to%20receive%22&clipping_id=16500265 had been clipped on newspapers.com]. Ditto with [https://www-newspapers-com.wikipedialibrary.idm.oclc.org/article/washington-telegraph-choctaw-humor/52562733/ "Choctaw Humor"]. I'd rather not include an image of the editorial as it doesn't directly refer to Poison Spring and is incredibly inflammatory and I don't think the short "Choctaw Humor" piece really warrants an image. [[User:Hog Farm|Hog Farm]] <sub> ''[[User talk:Hog Farm|Talk]]''</sub> 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC) |
** Eakin's later racist screed [https://www-newspapers-com.wikipedialibrary.idm.oclc.org/image/273087532/?match=1&terms=%22not%20bound%20to%20receive%22&clipping_id=16500265 had been clipped on newspapers.com]. Ditto with [https://www-newspapers-com.wikipedialibrary.idm.oclc.org/article/washington-telegraph-choctaw-humor/52562733/ "Choctaw Humor"]. I'd rather not include an image of the editorial as it doesn't directly refer to Poison Spring and is incredibly inflammatory and I don't think the short "Choctaw Humor" piece really warrants an image. [[User:Hog Farm|Hog Farm]] <sub> ''[[User talk:Hog Farm|Talk]]''</sub> 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC) |
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***Okay after reading, not wanting to include those is totally understandable. Maybe including links to these as additional citations or footnotes would make sense? Ultimately your editorial call but I was interested to read the full writings after reading that paragraph and I don't think I would be the only one. [[User:Elli|Elli]] ([[User_talk:Elli|talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Elli|contribs]]) 02:36, 25 April 2024 (UTC) |
***Okay after reading, not wanting to include those is totally understandable. Maybe including links to these as additional citations or footnotes would make sense? Ultimately your editorial call but I was interested to read the full writings after reading that paragraph and I don't think I would be the only one. [[User:Elli|Elli]] ([[User_talk:Elli|talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Elli|contribs]]) 02:36, 25 April 2024 (UTC) |
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**** I've included the longer piece as an external link |
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*Maybe worth mentioning that this was part of the Camden Expedition in the infobox as well? |
*Maybe worth mentioning that this was part of the Camden Expedition in the infobox as well? |
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*Would suggest a mention of this being considered a particularly notable massacre. |
*Would suggest a mention of this being considered a particularly notable massacre. |
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Didn't conduct a source review here so my comments are just based on the prose. Nice work! This was an interesting though rather sad read. [[User:Elli|Elli]] ([[User_talk:Elli|talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Elli|contribs]]) 23:19, 24 April 2024 (UTC) |
Didn't conduct a source review here so my comments are just based on the prose. Nice work! This was an interesting though rather sad read. [[User:Elli|Elli]] ([[User_talk:Elli|talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Elli|contribs]]) 23:19, 24 April 2024 (UTC) |
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: {{ping|Elli}} - Thanks for the review! I've replied above. Unfortunately, I'm not aware of any free to use good maps for the Camden Expedition. [[User:Hog Farm|Hog Farm]] <sub> ''[[User talk:Hog Farm|Talk]]''</sub> 00:48, 26 April 2024 (UTC) |
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Battle of Poison Spring
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This article tells the story of what one academic has described as the "worst war crime ever committed on Arkansas soil". On April 18, a Union wagon train was ambushed by Confederate cavalry. Despite the sounds of the battle being audible at the main Union camp, no assistance was sent. The battle then devolves into racially motivated butchery. While not as well-known as the Fort Pillow Massacre or the Lawrence Massacre, this is still one of the most infamous war crimes of the American Civil War. Hog Farm Talk 13:04, 23 April 2024 (UTC)
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Will review shortly. Elli (talk | contribs) 22:37, 24 April 2024 (UTC)
- Background
- Given that the Red River campaign and the Camden Expedition are linked prominently in prose, hatnote probably isn't necessary.
- Removed
- Would it be possible to include a map showing the military situation? Fine if not ofc.
- Closest thing that exists on Commons that I'm aware of is File:Red River Campaign map.jpg while is unusable because it shows Steele coming down out of what is now Oklahoma for some reason rather than through Arkansas Hog Farm Talk 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC)
- "began a joint operation up the Red River" wouldn't "along" make more sense? "up" implies going upstream, but the forces in Arkansas would be heading downstream towards Louisiana. Looking at the article on the campaign it seems like forces headed in from both directions, so "along" would contextually make more sense here.
- Rephrased both here and in the lead
- A map showing the details of the campaign would also be useful (such as the movements from Little Rock to Arkadelphia and the meeting in Prairie D'Ane with troops from Fort Smith).
- Unfortunately, we lack one and it's beyond my ability to create anything like that. This exists and is public domain but is somewhat illegible and I can't imagine that it would be overly useful to a reader even if clearer due to the surrounding area being blank, leaving no context. Hog Farm Talk 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC)
- Prelude
- "All but one of the steam-powered gristmills in the area had been destroyed; Stelle sent part of the 36th Iowa Infantry Regiment to operate it on April 17." would probably read clearer as "Only one of the steam-powered gristmills in the area remained usable; Stelle sent part of the 36th Iowa Infantry Regiment to operate it on April 17."
- Done
- "quartermaster, Captain Charles A. Henry with" should have either a comma after "Henry", or not one after "quartermaster"
- Added one after Henry
- link no quarter in the quote?
- Done
- The first mention of White Oak Creek implies we should already know what it is. Was that their destination? Should probably mention the name earlier if so.
- I've added a reference earlier - Thayer told Williams that there was probably a lot of forage around White Oak Creek
- Battle
- Fixed a few typos here.
- Thank you!
- "Steele did not attempt to aid the foraging party" do we know why? (fine if not ofc)
- Nobody really seems to know; I've added a statement to this effect sourced to DeBlack 2003b
- Massacre
- Do any scans of this Washington Telegraph "reporting" exist?
- Eakin's later racist screed had been clipped on newspapers.com. Ditto with "Choctaw Humor". I'd rather not include an image of the editorial as it doesn't directly refer to Poison Spring and is incredibly inflammatory and I don't think the short "Choctaw Humor" piece really warrants an image. Hog Farm Talk 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC)
- Okay after reading, not wanting to include those is totally understandable. Maybe including links to these as additional citations or footnotes would make sense? Ultimately your editorial call but I was interested to read the full writings after reading that paragraph and I don't think I would be the only one. Elli (talk | contribs) 02:36, 25 April 2024 (UTC)
- I've included the longer piece as an external link
- Okay after reading, not wanting to include those is totally understandable. Maybe including links to these as additional citations or footnotes would make sense? Ultimately your editorial call but I was interested to read the full writings after reading that paragraph and I don't think I would be the only one. Elli (talk | contribs) 02:36, 25 April 2024 (UTC)
- Eakin's later racist screed had been clipped on newspapers.com. Ditto with "Choctaw Humor". I'd rather not include an image of the editorial as it doesn't directly refer to Poison Spring and is incredibly inflammatory and I don't think the short "Choctaw Humor" piece really warrants an image. Hog Farm Talk 01:39, 25 April 2024 (UTC)
- Aftermath and preservation
- Given that this appears to have received recent scholarship, is it worth discussing analysis of this battle/massacre explicitly? I know this is discussed some in the Massacre section but wondering if more could be added here.
- Lead
- Maybe worth mentioning that this was part of the Camden Expedition in the infobox as well?
- Done
- Would suggest a mention of this being considered a particularly notable massacre.
- Done
Didn't conduct a source review here so my comments are just based on the prose. Nice work! This was an interesting though rather sad read. Elli (talk | contribs) 23:19, 24 April 2024 (UTC)