Draft talk:Bitzino
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To the Reviewer:[edit]
Dear Reviewer, Should this not pass inspections, could you please provide more actionable feedback on how to revise my writing so that it passes inspection?
This is my second attempt at writing this article, and it is also my first attempt at writing a Wikipedia article. A friend suggested I write about this topic, and I do not have much background in the subject area. My first article received the same feedback from two different reviewers, stating that it reads more like an advertisement than an encyclopedia article. However, I did not receive any meaningful feedback on how to change the tone. Since the company has not been in business for nearly a decade, I don't understand how it can read like an advertisement. I assume the issue might be due to my simple language, as English is not my first language.
I appreciate your help on this matter, as I hope to write many more articles about the history of the region where I live. I chose a simpler topic, Bitzino, first to hone my skills before taking on more ambitious tasks. Thank you again for your time and any additional help you can provide.