Talk:.hack//G.U./GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 18:54, 27 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take on this review. If I'm not back by this time next week, ping me. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:54, 27 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks ProtoDrake. No rush, but please do ping me on this review as I am a co-nominator and Tintor is having net issues. Axem Titanium (talk) 01:39, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Axem Titanium and Tintor2: I've looked through this article. As it stands at the moment, it's fairly close to a pass. It's well researched, comprehensive without being bloated, and stays on topic. There are some points that stood out to me.

Image description of cover art box doesn't match up with categories, and there's no source.
- Replaced
Is there a better source for the cast image than TV Tropes? Is that actually where it's from, or was it cooped from somewhere else by them as an illustration?
- Replaced image. For some reason, the original image was removed.
In the lead, the term "game within a game" is only used once, and there doesn't appear to be any overt commentary on the usage of this phrase, let alone another place where it's used in quotes.
- Done.
In "Gameplay", there should be a mention of the game's true genre as well as its fictional genre.
- Done. Action RPG
In "Gameplay", the last sentence of the second paragraph is uncited.
- Done
  - @Axem Titanium: Is BagoGames a reliable, citable source in this instance? --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:57, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - I replaced it with another ref on the VGRS list. Axem Titanium (talk) 20:36, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
In Reception, the term "translation script" should I think either be "translation" or "translated script".
- Done

The following are more suggestions.

Put JP text parts into footnotes, as they can clutter the prose for some readers.
- Done
Archive as many sources as seems fit, as things like dev blob posts have an unhealthy habit of becoming inaccessible.
- Archived. I still I don't know if I fixed the stuff well. Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 17:38, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Those are the ones I noted. Putting on hold for now. --ProtoDrake (talk) 10:18, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Axem Titanium: Although I revised some stuff, I can't make the footnotes from the lead appropiately. I had to change the image to another group shot.Tintor2 (talk) 18:42, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I fixed the footnotes (you missed a set of "}}" template brackets). I updated the image fair use rationales and uploaded a cleaner version of the character image. Thanks for the review, ProtoDrake! I think we covered all these points. Axem Titanium (talk) 20:36, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Axem Titanium and Tintor2: With the improvements, I think we can call this a Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:39, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much! Axem Titanium (talk) 21:46, 6 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]