Talk:14th/32nd Battalion (Australia)/GA1
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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 08:34, 22 October 2011 (UTC)
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[edit]- Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
- Version of the article when review was closed: [2]
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Criteria
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS):
- "Upon formation the battalion adopted the territorial title of the "Prahran/Footscray Regiment" and they were assigned to the 6th Brigade, 4th Division...", consider "Upon formation the battalion adopted the territorial title of the "Prahran/Footscray Regiment" and was assigned to the 6th Brigade, 4th Division."
- "The Japanese position sat atop a 600 feet (180 m) hill...", "600 feet" is used as an adjective here so it should be "600-foot". This can be done by using the adj=on parameter in the {{convert}} template.
- "and machine gun and mortar fire...", specifically "machine gun" should be hypthenated per the Macquirie dictionary (i.e. "machine-gun").
- "an outflanking move...", would this read better as "a flanking move"?
- "machine gun" here too: "came under intense machine gun fire as they attempted to round Mount Sugi..."
- wording here seems a little problematic: "but after two hours they too came under intense machine gun fire as they attempted to round Mount Sugi and attack the Japanese from the rear, forcing it to dig-in to the north of Bacon Hill." Consider "but after two hours they too came under intense machine-gun fire as they attempted to round Mount Sugi and attack the Japanese from the rear, forcing them to dig-in to the north of Bacon Hill."
- "At this point the situation for the attackers became quite desperate...", consider "At this point the situation became desperate for the attackers..."
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- All main points are supported by inline citations using WP:RS.
- Consistent citation style used throughout article.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- Coverage seems sufficient.
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- a (fair representation):
b (all significant views):
- No issues detected with POV.
- a (fair representation):
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No issues here either.
- No edit wars etc.:
- It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
- a (tagged and captioned):
b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):
c (non-free images have fair use rationales):
d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
- All images appear to be PD and are appropriate for the article.
- a (tagged and captioned):
- Overall:
- a Pass/Fail:
- A couple of minor points re wording. Otherwise this is succint and well-written article which meets all of the GA criteria in my opinion. Happy to promote once the last few points have been dealt with / discussed. Anotherclown (talk) 12:58, 22 October 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I think I've covered off on all your points. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 13:13, 22 October 2011 (UTC)
- Looks good, passing now. Anotherclown (talk) 13:28, 22 October 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I think I've covered off on all your points. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 13:13, 22 October 2011 (UTC)
- a Pass/Fail: