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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 04:07, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "The first storm, Tropical Storm One, appeared on May 13 south of Cuba, while the final system, Tropical Storm Fifteen" - it seems odd to highlight these unofficial names. It's not like it was known as "Tropical Storm One". I suggest "The first storm appeared... while the final tropical storm..."
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "The early 20th century lacked modern forecasting and documentation, and thus, the hurricane database from these years may be incomplete. " - what does modern forecasting have to do with the database being incomplete?
- Maybe adding "satellite imagery" would make that more clear--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- I have a beef with describing certain storms by their article titles. For instance, the "Gulf Coast hurricane" and "Pensacola hurricane" could both arguably be the same storm, but they make sense for article titles. They just shouldn't be referred so generically.
- "The most intense tropical cyclone of the season was Hurricane Six, also known as the Texas hurricane, which peaked as a Category 4 on the modern-day Saffir–Simpson scale. - I object to using both "Hurricane Six" and "known as the Texas hurricane." If it had a more commonly used name, sure, that would be fine, but it's just the place where it hit.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- Likewise, "the Gulf Coast hurricane" isn't really a name. Saying "An early July hurricane along the northern Gulf Coast" is more informative than implying a name that isn't official.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "Heavy rains from this storm set the stage for record-breaking floods by the Charleston hurricane" - likewise, this would be better if it was more descriptive, like saying "by a hurricane hitting Charleston in mid-July".
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "Hurricane Eight left severe damage and 50 deaths in Dominica"
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- " In October, the Virgin Islands hurricane devastated the archipelago" --> "An early October hurricane devastated the Virgin Islands." Although is "devastated really appropriate?
- Fixed. Yes, I think "devastated" is appropriate, especially when considering the impacts on Saint Croix, Saint John, Saint Thomas, and Tortola--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "That same month, the Pensacola hurricane was attributed to at least $100,000 in damage and 29 deaths, 20 of which occurred when a ship sank in the Caribbean Sea. " --> "The final hurricane landfall in the United States was a hurricane that struck Pensacola, which killed 29 people, 20 of which occurred when a ship sank in the Caribbean Sea." I don't mean to be nitpicky about the names, but I feel there is a better way of conveying the information.
- I did something similar to your suggestion--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "One of the hurricanes was also known as the Texas hurricane, which became the strongest tropical cyclone of the season, peaking at Category 4 intensity on the modern-day Saffir–Simpson scale with maximum sustained winds of 130 mph (215 km/h)" - apparently it was the strongest hurricane to hit the US in three decades. Per its article - " In terms of pressure, the 1916 Texas hurricane was stronger than any other landfalling tropical cyclone in the United States since 1886."
- Added that info--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- No NE impacts from H3?
- I wasn't able to find anything beyond that sustained wind speed at Nantucket that I could definitively link to the storm. In addition to Newspapers.com and Climatological Data, I also tried checking Wayne Cotterly's thing about Maine hurricanes and he didn't even mention this one--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- Check the infobox for H4
- Oops. I sometimes use the infobox to check a wind speed to see what mph and km/h is when I input knots. Input --> show preview --> copy and paste the output --> put the original number back. But I guess I accidentally saved the page before putting the original number back --12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "marking the second time in a fortnight " - I'll only allow this if you do the entire article with the FFF system.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- So I notice, you don't discuss much about the basis for which the storm intensities were determined
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 07:39, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "The damage toll ultimately ended up at $36,370." - "ultimately" seems a bit... I dunno. It stood out to me.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "A tropical storm formed on October 2 about 150 mi (240 km) east of the Abaco Islands" - it seems odd to focus on this part of the Bahamas, since elsewhere in the article you just reference to the Bahamas as a whole
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- Not directly related to this article, but I suggested merging 1916 Black Friday Storm with the [[1916 Pensacola hurricane]
- I would support that idea but debating on a merger like that is a bit of the scope of this GAN--12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- "about 100 mi (160 km) north-northwest of Barranquilla, Colombia, early on November 11" - is the city that important?
- In Colombia? Yes. It has like 2.2 million people. For this article? No :P --12george1 (talk) 05:12, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
- As usual, look out for duplicate links.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:13, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
All in all, it's a pretty good article, just not quite a "good article". It shouldn't take much work though, nothing was that serious in my review. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:07, 28 September 2021 (UTC)