Talk:1930 Salmas earthquake/GA1

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:18, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! This is a very interesting and well-written article. I am eager to review this.

Hi Sainsf, and thanks for having a look at the article and finding some room for improvement. I appreciate it. I'll add check marks or explanations for each of the points below. Thanks, Dawnseeker2000.

Lead

Link or explain surface faulting. This may not be understood by some readers. Done (surface faulting → surface faulting)

Preface

Link epicentral, Kurdish people, volcano. Done (Three items linked)
...prior to the event (which was one of the strongest earthquakes to occur in Iran since 1900) How is this relevant fact not mentioned in the lead? Done (I added a little bit to the lead: The earthquake, which was among Iran's largest, measured 7.1...)
I think "Montane villagers" looks better than "Mountain villagers". Done ((Mountain villagers → Montane villagers)
Wheat is too common to be linked. Done (unlinked)
You could directly link cattle farming. Not done (I looked at linking cattle farming, but it redirects to Ranch, and since I think their cows may not have had that sort of luxury, I left that one as is :) )
To the west near the Turkish border lies Aravil Dagi --> To the west, near the Turkish border, lies Aravil Dagi Done (Yes, much better)

Foreshock

Convert the local time here, as you did in the lead. Done
Link Turkey. Done

Earthquake

Link faulting, Armenia. Done (Fault is linked several times in succession in that section, so I left it as is: (oblique-slip, strike-slip, dip-slip) – Also linked Armenia)
... occurred on a fault trending WNW–ESE I see you mean the directions when you abbreviate them, but I think it looks better when you expand the words. To some, the meaning may not even be apparent at first. Done (Added: ...on a fault trending west-northwest...)
Ambraseys & Melville's catalog of Persian events Could you please add something about this? Link it or explain it, because the reader should know the authority well.' Done (I linked each of the sources that are listed in this section using {{harvnb}})
You need to identify who Tchalenko, Berberian and Utsu are. It may be difficult, but it is necessary to specify their professions. Done (I added "seismologists J. S. Tchalenko and M. Berberian". For the Utsu item: he is also a seismologist and is well-known for his 2002 catalog, which was being cited via the PAGER-CAT catalog, which is a compilation of catalogs) I added his catalog separately so that I could link it directly in the text for clarity. (!))
... but researchers questioned the reliability of this figure. This sounds somewhat vague. Who were these researchers? This issue can be resolved if you cite at least one such (valid) person as an example. Done (This one is bundled with the two requests/changes from directly above and involved listing the names of the seismologists that are in the citation)
The foreshock was also not felt strongly east of Lake Urmia (and to the southwest of Tabriz) I would suggest some swapping and rewording so that this reads ...not strongly felt to the east of Lake... Because as it is, it may imply either that it was not strongly felt in the area or it was simply not felt "strongly east" or "extremely east" of the lake. Done (not felt strongly east of Lake Urmia → not strongly felt to the east of Lake Urmia)
At that time, 16 kilometers (9.9 mi)) of surface breaks with right-lateral offsets ... I think "right-lateral offsets" needs a bit of explanation. Done (Right-lateral → Dextral)
...were located between Shurgil and Kuhneh Shahr What are these? Villages? Done (Yes, I changed it to read "were located between the villages of Shurgil and Kuhneh Shahr")
...they had completed their survey forty-five years later... Elsewhere you use numbers like "85", "30 kilometers" then why use words here for 45? Done (Aligned the text to WP:NUMERAL)
Link water table. Done (Linked)
As a general note, please check that you have linked all the villages that could be linked, you may have missed out some. Done (I did another round checking each of the village names and I think all are accounted for, as in, I linked each item that made sense)

This is a really nice article. Enjoyed reading it! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 07:18, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, Sainsf. The article is better off because of it! Dawnseeker2000

Thanks @Dawnseeker2000: for ... well, do I need to say anymore after leaving you a gift on your talkpage? OK, so this article now meets all the requirements for GA status. So I am glad to promote this to the GA level. Congrats! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 08:53, 2 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]