Talk:2000 Rio 200/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HawkAussie (talk · contribs) 04:06, 21 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

I'll sure do this review and hopefully this will be enough for Good Article status. HawkAussie (talk) 04:06, 21 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead

...after he started from the sixteenth position. - Change this to after he started from sixteenth.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It gave the first position to Fernández. - This probably is too short of a sentence and could better weaved into the previous sentence.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Background

...of Championship Auto Racing Teams' (CART) 2000 series schedule - You don't need to link Champ Car again as you had already did it in the lead. Maybe do something like ...of CART 2000 series schedule.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
...consecutive year the Rio 200 - Comma between year and the
- Not sure that would result in an improvement so I have not added an extra comma in. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
...first of fourth straight - I assume this meant to be four not fourth
- Fixed. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
...from Long Beach two weeks earlier - This is probably an easy fix but maybe create the page for the Long Beach event.
- Creating the article is something I planned to do in the future. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Practice and Qualifying

He pulled off to the left of the track on the main straight... - This isn't really clear.
- Reworded the sentence for better clarity. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
What does the word clouting mean as I would have to look it up to know
- It means that a driver has had a heavy accident. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I feel like we don't need to know every single person standing from qualifying as that seems slightly overboard.
- I've decided to do some pruning of the original text that retains mention of all the drivers starting positions but in a way that is more concise. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Warm-up

Seems fine here

Race

Looks fine here

Post-race

Looks fine here as well.

Final Comments

Looking at the improved article, I think this is good enough. Well done on getting another GA. HawkAussie (talk) 23:20, 2 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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