Talk:2003 Afro-Asian Games/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:32, 25 February 2010 (UTC) Upon reviewing this article, I'm noticing a lot of issues, listed below:[reply]

You note in the first sentence the names used, but the infobox has "I Afro Asian Games". Change it to one of the other terms.
"Secunderabad, the twin city of Hyderabad, played a crucial role in these Games. With a combined population of nearly four million people, Hyderabad-Secunderabad is one of the largest urban megalopoleis in the World." This feels out of place in the first lead paragraph. Maybe reword saying that it took place in Secunderabad/Hyderabad?
"These Games, however, had lesser scope than the Asian Games or Commonwealth Games, since 96 nations participated in only eight sports." This feels misleading, since above you note it was eight disciplines, rather than sports.
"All preparations were completed in a record 60 days before the events began." What kind of record do we mean here? A little confusing, that part's probably unnecessary.
In the transport section, the first paragraph just feels like a slightly less detailed version of the second. Combine the two and have it flow better since it repeats itself a bit.
The 9/11 reference in the logo section doesn't seem necessary to me.
Some of the articles in the Sports section go to at the 2003 Afro-Asian games, but others go to the general term. What I'd like to see are sections for each part; Those with the sub-article wouldn't need much of a section, but for those that don't have one, information can be added to this article.
- By extension, when that's added in the highlights section can be added in the appropriate areas.
"The opening and closing ceremonies were described as "gala" and "fabulous" by several media centers. " Cite needed for quotes.
There's not really structure to the opening ceremony section; it's just a slew of one and two sentence chunks. They can be combined into two nice paragraphs.
The quote near the bottom of the Closing ceremony section is hiding some of the text. A different quote box might be better. I'll review the closing and highlights section when that's fixed since I can't read parts of them.
When referencing, make sure to include publishers, and dates or authors if possible, as well as the url/title/accessdate. Most just have the first three, which is okay but for GA I'd prefer they be as detailed as they can.
Lastly, what was the impact afterwards, both regionally and internationally? I'm sure there's plenty on that since this was the first one.

This is definitely not a bad article. The technical aspects in particular are impressive. However, I am finding that a lot more needs to be added and modified to be a GA. I'm tempted to fail the article now, particularly for the sports section note, but I'll put it on hold for a week to see if you can get at least most of the issues fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:32, 25 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

So far so good, just wrap up those last couple points. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:35, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Response to said suggestions

A number of issues with this article have been rectified. To make them clear, I shall strike out all those issues that have already been clarified :-

~~You note in the first sentence the names used, but the infobox has "I Afro Asian Games". Change it to one of the other terms.~~
"Secunderabad, the twin city of Hyderabad, played a crucial role in these Games. With a combined population of nearly four million people, Hyderabad-Secunderabad is one of the largest urban megalopoleis in the World." This feels out of place in the first lead paragraph. Maybe reword saying that it took place in Secunderabad/Hyderabad?
"These Games, however, had lesser scope than the Asian Games or Commonwealth Games, since 96 nations participated in only eight sports." This feels misleading, since above you note it was eight disciplines, rather than sports.
~~"All preparations were completed in a record 60 days before the events began." What kind of record do we mean here? A little confusing, that part's probably unnecessary.~~
~~In the transport section, the first paragraph just feels like a slightly less detailed version of the second. Combine the two and have it flow better since it repeats itself a bit.~~
~~The 9/11 reference in the logo section doesn't seem necessary to me.~~
Some of the articles in the Sports section go to at the 2003 Afro-Asian games, but others go to the general term. What I'd like to see are sections for each part; Those with the sub-article wouldn't need much of a section, but for those that don't have one, information can be added to this article.
- By extension, when that's added in the highlights section can be added in the appropriate areas.
~~"The opening and closing ceremonies were described as "gala" and "fabulous" by several media centers. " Cite needed for quotes.~~
~~There's not really structure to the opening ceremony section; it's just a slew of one and two sentence chunks. They can be combined into two nice paragraphs.~~
The quote near the bottom of the Closing ceremony section is hiding some of the text. A different quote box might be better. I'll review the closing and highlights section when that's fixed since I can't read parts of them.
When referencing, make sure to include publishers, and dates or authors if possible, as well as the url/title/accessdate. Most just have the first three, which is okay but for GA I'd prefer they be as detailed as they can.
~~Lastly, what was the impact afterwards, both regionally and internationally? I'm sure there's plenty on that since this was the first one.~~

I'm going to WP:AGF on those last couple articles being created, since it's technically its own article and not this one. Since that was the only outstanding issue, I am passing this article as a GA. Nice work. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 20:16, 6 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]