Talk:2012 Bojangles' Southern 500/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HawkAussie (talk · contribs) 03:17, 14 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will be picking this one up and hopefully I can able to review this.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

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Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Lead

...it after a second pit stop cycle. - Maybe slighty change that to it after the second pit stop cycle.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Johnson took the first position for the... - Should this be "took the lead" to keep it consist over the article.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...green–white–checker finish (extending the race to 368 laps), - Is the section is the () bracket needed because you had already mentioned it earler in the sentence or is this a misspell because you had lap 367 in the race section
- Reworded MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...field and he held the lead to win the race. - Maybe modify to "held it to..."
- Done MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The race attracted 5.716 million television viewers. - I assume this is referencing to the infobox as it seems out of place otherwise.
- It's the standard in NASCAR race report articles MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Background

was third in the Drivers' Championship with 369 poinits - You could probably remove the in the drivers championship in that section.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
No. 73 car in a third car - Probably best to remove the "in a third car" section.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Practice and qualifying

...120 minutes long, while the second lasted 45 minutes. - I assume you missed the "long" in the second session for consistency.
- Reworded MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Harvick was quickest with a time of 27.769 seconds in the first session,... - Maybe slighty change the sentence format so "in the first session" is at the start.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...a second of Harvick's time. Ryan Newman,... - Possibly of merging of those two short sentences.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Adding to that section, you have said the time in the second session but not in the first session.
- Only added the first of the fastest overall drivers in both practice sessions 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
...were entered in the qualifier on Friday evening, - Slighty change that 'into qualifying' on something along those lines as qualifier isn't really probably the best word to put in.
- Reworded MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...the fifth and sixth positions. - Slight rewording there.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Race

...(UTC−04:00) in the United States on Fox. Missing a reference that Fox was doing this race.
- Added MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I will make it easier to say, do we really need to know what is happening outside of the top 10 drivers.
- Removed MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Johnson got ahead of Biffle for the lead temporarily, but he did not hold it at the start/finish line. - Was this on the same lap as the Gordon contact with the wall?
- Clarified MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...began on the same lap. Biffle made his pit stop... - Possibly merge those sentences?
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...took over the spot for lap 101. - I assume this means lead here.
- Clarified MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...for the lap-179... - space between lap and 179.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...moved up another position by overtaking Truex for third on - Possible rewording here?
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Kurt Busch was overtaken by Stewart on the 207th lap. Edwards slid sideways and was passed by Johnson three laps later. - Both of these sentences are missing the position that was gained here.
- Clarified MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...pit stops under the caution. Hamlin took the lead... - Possibly merge these two sentences.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...Biffle to claim fifth place. He got ahead of Stewart... - Another merge of sentences possibly?
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...claim the eleventh position. and Harvick overtook Bowyer... - Remove the full stop if keeping the drivers out of the drivers in the top 10
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...caution. It was caused by Labonte - Another one of possibly merging those two sentences.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
...he did not regain the first position - Maybe change it to regain the lead.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Post-race

that no person involved in fracas punched each other - Fracas???
- Clarified MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

References

The top copyvio pages that detected are only because of the quotes so that seems fine.
Only possible issue with references is number 3 as their seems to be a connection issue. Other than that, the rest seem to be fine.
- Fixed MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Possible an issue with two paragraphs only having the one reference right at the end of that particular paragraph.
- Added MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Final comments

Is their possibly an image for that race in general (maybe logo for that race or something else) to not have the infobox feel like something is missing.
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
What about the using image of Kyle Busch in 2012 [1] instead of the picture in 2015 to make it more accurate.'
- Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Other than that I think it is close to a Good Article.
@HawkAussie: All of the points raised above have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- @MWright96: Congrats on the GA. HawkAussie (talk) 12:19, 22 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.