Talk:2016 Spanish Grand Prix/GA1
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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 18:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)
I'll take on this review. What a historic day for all of motorsport. Z105space (talk) 18:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
General
[edit]- One thing I keep noting in your articles is that you sometimes spell the drivers' full names out after the first instance. It's best to avoid this.
- Hmm, I always try to keep the prose flowing, with full names often in new sections, to make it a little easier for readers who might not read the entire article... Zwerg Nase (talk) 19:25, 17 June 2016 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- The first mention of team-mate should be unhyphened as is seen in the rest of the article for consistency.
- "Max Verstappen won the race upon his debut for his new team Red Bull, having swapped his Toro Rosso seat with Daniil Kvyat ahead of the race." - try to avoid repetition of the word "race"; in the second instance it should be "event".
- Both Done
Free practice
[edit]- "two ninety-minute practice sessions" -ninety-minute should be spelt in number form per MOS:NUMBERS for consistency with high-value numbers as is seen in the article.
- Done
- "The Mercedes of Rosberg and Hamilton followed," - This may sound better: "Mercedes teammates Rosberg and Hamilton followed,"
- Done
- "Force India's Sergio Pérez managed only nine laps as he spent much of the session in the pits after smoke emerged from the rear of his car." - pits is slang and should be avoided, pit lane is better.
- Done
- "Upon beginning his preparation laps for qualifying, Rosberg had to come back into the pits," - ditto.
- Done
Qualifying
[edit]- fifty-second should be spelt in number form.
- According to MOS:NUMERAL, fifty-second is acceptable.
- "The two Red Bulls - Red Bull cars
- Done
Race
[edit]- "When Vettel pitted on lap 16," -pitted is slang, rewrite to "made a pit stop"
- Done
- "he emerged third behind the two Red Bulls," - as in the qualifying section, change to "Red Bull cars"
- Done
- "By lap twenty," - should be spelt in number form for consistency.
- Done
References
[edit]- No dead links
That is all I found. On hold until the issues have been addressed. Z105space (talk) 08:51, 14 June 2016 (UTC)
- @Z105space: Should be good to go. Thank you for another swift review! Zwerg Nase (talk) 19:33, 17 June 2016 (UTC)
- @Zwerg Nase: I can now pass. Once again, good work! Z105space (talk) 19:46, 17 June 2016 (UTC)