Talk:2018 Zurich ePrix/GA1

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Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm (talk · contribs) 13:07, 17 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

and Jaguar battled for the position and completed the top five with 96 points to and Jaguar completed the top five with 96 points .

lap late on in warm air and track temperatures at one minute and 11.995 seconds. Mitch Evans (Jaguar), Abt, Nelson Piquet Jr. (Jaguar), Oliver Turvey (NIO), Bird, Vergne, Rosenqvist, Buemi andJosé María López (Dragon) were in positions two through to ten - The bold section needs to be reworded as it is sounding weird and remove the team names in brackets.
straight. Bird lost to straight and he lost
What is - left-rear pod. ?
qualifying were Alex Lynn (Virgin), Bird, Vergne, André Lotterer (Techeetah), Buemi and Piquet. Please remove the brackets with the team names .
Heidfeld, Edoardo Mortara (Venturi) and António Félix da Costa (Andretti).Maro Engel (Venturi) - again same issue as above.
- @Kpgjhpjm: Have taken action on all of the points raised so far. MWright96 (talk) 21:17, 27 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lotterer was left to keep Bird from taking second - I know what you mean but this could be reworded as bit for flow and clarity.
Di Grassi tried to pass d'Ambrosio around the outside - for which position ?
The rest of the field passed with minor contact - passed through where ?
How did Piquet and Abt get damage ?
because the driver was to the inside of him but he avoided picking up a front-right puncture - this really needs to be reworded

@Kpgjhpjm: I have done all of the points that have been raised above and have undertaken some additional edits to the prose. MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 29 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]