Talk:2021 West Coast Eagles women's season/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be taking at this! — Ghost River 22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

Good

Background

"2020 was their first year in the AFL Women's competition." → "They began playing in the AFL Women's league during the 2020 season."
"mens' team" → "men's team"
"continued on being"

Playing list

"a trade that involves West Coast" → "a trade that involved West Coast"
Link 2020 AFL Women's draft in the second paragraph and delink in the third
- Which exact phrase do you think should be linked? Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mixed sentence tense in the sentence beginning "If players were undrafted"

Season summary

Quite long without subheads; maybe break up by month like baseball season GAs?
- I broke it up by rounds. Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"The fixture was revealed on 11 December 2020, however it changed several times after that due to restrictions and border closures caused by the COVID-19 pandemic" → "The planned fixture was revealed on 11 December 2020; continued restrictions and border closures caused by the COVID-19 pandemic, however, forced it to change several times"
The way it's currently set up, "reigning premiers" feels a bit WP:EASTEREGGy to me; should mention earlier that Adelaide are the reigning champs
"for West Coast. Brianna" → "for West Coast, but three players suffered injuries:"
"This meant that" I'm a little confused about what "this" is supposed to mean; is it because it's a Western Derby?
"because a knife fell off" → "when a knife fell off"
Missing period after "four outs for round 2"
"wasn't considered too bad" → "was not considered a total failure"
"Parris Laurie and Andrea Gilmore played, after their injuries ended up not being serious" → "Parris Laurie and Andrea Gilmore's injuries were minor enough to allow them to return"
was also due to play her first game back from her knee injury, but was a late out due to her knee repetitive phrasing
I'm assuming "Grace Kelly" should be targeted towards Grace Kelly (footballer) and not the princess it currently links to

Awards

"Mikayla Bowen was named" → "Bowen was also named"

References

Good!

General comments

Images are properly licensed and relevant
Images should be moved slightly to avoid MOS:SANDWICH issues
Per MOS:CAPTION, the captions, as full sentences, should end in periods
No stability concerns in the revision history
Copyvio score looks great at 7.4%

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Please feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — Ghost River 22:58, 13 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I have done all changes bar one. See my comment above. Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I've made the last change myself. Passing now — Ghost River 16:19, 14 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]