Talk:4 Walls/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 21:09, 18 June 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• The album cover images requires an alt description; please add one
• Remove the "Promo" parameter from the singles infobox please
• Please provide a link to the article for the same–titled song "4 Walls"

Lead

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• "It marked the group's first release as a four-member group after it had been known as a five-member group before the departure of member Sulli in August 2015." --> "It marked the group's first release as a four-member group after former member Sulli departed them in August 2015."

Paragraph 2

• Add the years the tour was held in parentheses following the name of the tour: "Dimension 4 – Docking Station"

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• "The release peaked atop the South Korea's Gaon Album Chart and has sold over 76,000 physical copies in the country as of January 2016, and topped the Billboard World Albums Chart and charted at number thirty-nine on the Japanese Oricon Albums Chart." --> "The release peaked atop the South Korea's Gaon Album Chart and has sold over 76,000 physical copies in the country as of January 2016; in addition, 4 Walls topped the Billboard World Albums Chart and charted at number thirty-nine on the Japanese Oricon Albums Chart."
• Please provide a link to the article for the same–titled song "4 Walls"

Background

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• Remove the nationalities of the female members please; it is unnecessary
• "The album received positive reviews from music critics for its styles' incorporating synthpop, hip hop and EDM, and topped South Korea's Gaon Album Chart.[3][4]" --> Remove please; the "Critical reception" section covers all of this

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• All good

Release and promotion

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• "and further included six shows in four cities of Japan–Tokyo, Fukuoka, Osaka and Nagoya–from February 20 to 28, 2016.[16][17]" --> "and further included six shows in four cities of Japan: Tokyo, Fukuoka, Osaka and Nagoya. The tour lasted from February 20 to 28, 2016.[16][17]"

Musical styles

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• "Billboard magazine noted the" --> "Jeff Benjamin of Billboard magazine noted the"
• Remove "magazine" after "Billboard" please

Critical reception

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• Remove the link to "Billboard" please

Paragraph 2

• Since the article is written in American English: "labelled" --> "labeled"
• "did not applaud the songs "Deja Vu", "Papi", "Cash Me Out" and "When I'm Alone"." --> "disliked the songs "Deja Vu", "Papi", "Cash Me Out" and "When I'm Alone"."

Commercial performance

• Please add a topic sentence to this section
• Rest is great!

Track listing

• Headling change: "4 Walls — tracklist[38]" --> "4 Walls — Standard edition[38]"

End of GA Review:

Stupendous work Simon! I'd be glad to pass this after a few minor changes have been made. Contact me here with any questions, comments, or concerns. Thanks for your cooperation as always. Cheers! Carbrera (talk) 02:41, 19 June 2016 (UTC).

Sorry, but I will be failing this article due to inactivity for over a week. Please resubmit the article when you are less busy and contact me via my talk page and I'd be glad to review it again. Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 02:55, 26 June 2016 (UTC).

Carbrera, the article was re-nominated and I will be addressing these issues if you want to review it again. Random86 (talk) 04:11, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

Random86 I am the reviewer so I will be there if you have any questions! Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 04:21, 26 June 2016 (UTC).

Carbrera Paragraph 1 of the background section is talking about Red Light, not 4 Walls. Do you still think it should be removed? I think I fixed everything else. Random86 (talk) 21:39, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

Random86 You're right. It definitely shouldn't include a majority of it, like the "critical reception" section and etc. Carbrera (talk) 21:46, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

Carbrera I'm sorry, but I don't know what you mean. The background section has one sentence about the reception of Red Light; should it stay or go? Random86 (talk) 22:42, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

Random86 Yes, please remove it. Carbrera (talk) 22:46, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

Carbrera OK, it's been removed. Let me know if anything else needs to be changed. Random86 (talk) 22:50, 26 June 2016 (UTC)

Random86 No it's great; thank you! Carbrera (talk) 00:39, 27 June 2016 (UTC)