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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 17:55, 24 April 2016 (UTC)
Hi! Happy to review. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 17:55, 24 April 2016 (UTC)
- Hi! Let me know the comments! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 18:33, 24 April 2016 (UTC)
Nice article. Here are my comments:
- Lead:
- joint venture with AirAsia Berhad holding 49% of the airline, Tata Sons holding 40.06% and Telestra Tradeplace having the remaining 10% in the airline Better rephrase this as "joint venture with AirAsia Berhad holding 49% stake in the airline, Tata Sons holding 40.06% and Telestra Tradeplace holding the remaining 10%." Please check that the meaning is the same.
- What exactly is Telestra Tradeplace?
- Air Asia India commenced operations on 12 June 2014 with Bangalore as its primary hub. Would look better in first para.
- The company marked Tata's return to aviation industry after 60 years, having ceded Air India in 1946. Would look better in second para.
- joint venture with AirAsia Berhad holding 49% of the airline, Tata Sons holding 40.06% and Telestra Tradeplace having the remaining 10% in the airline Better rephrase this as "joint venture with AirAsia Berhad holding 49% stake in the airline, Tata Sons holding 40.06% and Telestra Tradeplace holding the remaining 10%." Please check that the meaning is the same.
Thanks, Magentic Manifestations. Now, continuing with the rest of the article:
- History:
- foreign direct investment of up to 49% "in airlines"?
- with Tata sons "S"ons
- ₹1.25 (1.9¢ US)/available seat kilometer "/" would look better as "per". "Kilometre" as per BE.
- The introduction of AirAsia was expected to By whom?
- an amount of US$50 million Could be converted to INR. (stated originally in US$, so did not convert)
- rent/lease aircraft The slash could be better replaced by "or".
- AirAsia India was established on 28 March 2013. AirAsia is the first foreign airline to set up a subsidiary in India. Can be combined.
- as its secondary hub Remove "as".
- after IndiGo and SpiceJet with "SpiceJet, with"
- foreign direct investment of up to 49% "in airlines"?
- Corporate affairs:
- founder of AirAsia group announced "group, announced"
- airline, however the latter refused "airline; however, Tata refused"
- Somewhere you say "chairman", elsewhere "Chairman".
- chief adviser "advisor" (BE)
- founder of AirAsia group announced "group, announced"
- Destinations:
- If each entry has a source then what is ref. 29 for?(think, no harm in additional reference from airline website.)
- Fleet:
- Link Airbus.
- import 10 A320-200 aircraft Would be better to say "ten" here.
- AirAsia India on 21 March 2015 "On 21 March 2015, AirAsia India"
- and the is registered as VT-APJ Error?
- Honor --> Honour (BE).
- Sources:
- In ref. 18, the publisher is Anna.aero.
- In ref. 18, the publisher is Anna.aero.
I think that should be it. These addressed, I would be happy to promote this. Cheers! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 04:26, 30 April 2016 (UTC)
- Sainsf, done!Magentic Manifestations (talk) 07:35, 30 April 2016 (UTC)
- Very well, promoted. Cheers! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 07:36, 30 April 2016 (UTC)